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    dots Submission Name: A letter for a frienddots
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    Author: Spiderwebb123
    Elite Ratio:    4.58 - 22/26/12
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Poetry/Lostfriend
    Total Views: 295
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    Description:
       This is a poem I wrote about a situation that I am going through with one of my friends. Some of it is true, some of it isn't. I'll let you decide. This deals with emotions and issues, that I am dealing with about the decisions that he is making and has made. It also deals with the decisons that I feel I must make.
    This poem is dedicated to Jon. I love you man!


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    dotsA letter for a frienddots
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    Dear friend,
    I want you to know:
    I care about you lots.
    I can't bear to see you getting hurt!

    You're being self destructive!
    I don't know what else I can do!

    I know that you must be sad
    and probably depressed.
    There's no way for me to know
    exactly what you are going through.

    I feel that the only way to hlep you,
    is to give this over to someone else.

    As much as I hate to say it
    or let it even come to mind,
    nothing will happen if I don't try.

    I feel I must take control
    because you don't seem to be able to.
    I would like to let you fix this yourself,
    but I just don't think that's gonna work.

    When I think about you,
    all that I can see,
    is you sitting off by yourself,
    and all because of me.

    I see you sitting in a cell,
    all lonely and cold.
    I see you being angry with me.

    I know that you porbably hate me
    and wish I would leave you alone,
    but I can't do that.
    I care about you too much.

    Someday you will realize
    That I am only trying to help.
    I'm doing this for you.

    I hope someday you'll understand,
    that this whole situation,
    has made and will make,
    you a better man.




    Submitted on 2006-01-07 00:31:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Exactly ... you captured our predicament quite nicely. Simple words to explain complex ideas. I really felt the emotion throughout the poem.
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by Psychohenry32 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi there. Your poem reminded me of a friend who had a problem with keeping her hands in her pockets when she went shopping. She was a kleptomaniac. Her parents tried many times to get help for her but nothing seemed to work. She didn't show up for her appointments with counsellers, she didn't want to believe she had a problem, it was everyone elses problem, not hers at all. She cut herself off from friends because she didn't want to believe the lies they were saying...the lies of course were how she saw it, the lies were the truth she couldn't bear to admit to. In the end, her parents, who felt they had no choice, called the police and she ended up in court. She is now receiving help for her illness and thankfully, she can see why her parents did what they did. A thought provoking write.
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by litllost | [ Reply to This ]
      To have to be the person that hands a situation like that over to someone else is definitely not a pleasant time. I think that it could be one of the hardest things anyone would ever have to do. You put a lot of emotion into this poem which is really good. Some people tend to try to write about emotional and stressful situations and don't put much emotion into the poem, which in turn makes it boring to read. Good luck with the situation.
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by Ravenwood | [ Reply to This ]
      sometimes i am in the your posistion, and many more times, i am in jon's.i am never in a neutral position unfortunately. i hope that you and jon work through this together. NEVER EVER leave him, no matter what he says. when i was in jons position i realize, that i need space, but i also need someone to talk to.he'll tell you when he's ready to talk, just ask him. he will be truthful, if he is anything like aany of my experiences. good luck man.
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by mysticwarloc | [ Reply to This ]



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