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    dots Submission Name: With Memories and a Teary Eyedots

    Author: Skinwalker
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 36/57/28
    Words: 271
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This is for all of those who take things for granted. Love your family, you never know what you have until it is gone...

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    dotsWith Memories and a Teary Eyedots

    "I'm glad to be back," I say.

    "How long can you stay?"

    Their question stunned me.
    Why can they not see?
    I have a life to live
    with my wife and kids.

    "I will stay until I cannot anymore
    for my feet are stuck out your door."

    "Is there anything we can do for you, son?"

    "There is so much you have already done."

    The last sentence made me teary-eyed.
    I tell myself I'll come back later, but I lie...

    "Well son, we want you to know we love you
    and that we only wanted the best for you."

    I set some roses by my feet and look at them.

    "I will be back, but I do not know when...."

    "It's okay, thanks for all the flowers!
    You may want to leave, it's about to shower!"

    I look at the the grey clouds in the sky
    and I begin to wonder why they fly so high.

    "Son, we love you and be careful!"

    That was something to mull.

    I tell them I will be as my umbrella unfolds.

    "Don't catch the flu or even a cold!"

    "I won't dad"... I turn and walk away...
    I turn and look at them...their grave.
    Together they died in a crash
    now they rest together under the grass.
    I wish to hear them, to hold them...
    and I will...but I know not when.
    I keep walking towards my car
    because on foot it is too far.
    I wander out of the cemetary
    with memories and a teary eye.

    Submitted on 2006-01-07 01:46:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't agree with this being boring or flat considering the content & how it affected your life.
    It's like you say in your description ~ the mundane is & you never know when it will change so appreciate always what you have & announce it - even when they're gone.
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smiles 2 share
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree a lot with Kalinda, this poem is so boring and flat. It almost put me to sleep... it has potential...
    I think...
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by mrmundane | [ Reply to This ]
      that poem says a lot, and it's very straightforward, the only thing that I wish it had was more descriptive writing and imagery. Other than that an enjoyable read, keep it up
    Regards, Kalinda
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by Kalinda | [ Reply to This ]

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