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    dots Submission Name: i hate youdots
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    Author: unclerob
    ASL Info:    33/m/kc ks
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 16/15/7
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 240
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 579



    Description:
       im trying to quit smoking


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    dotsi hate youdots
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    i run you follow
    tomorrow you'll catch me
    today we parlay
    cause ain't no way
    you going to get me
    i'm stronger than you think
    what are you thinking when you look like that?
    i love your individuality
    even though you came in a twenty pack
    your empty shells fill my space
    twenty four seven your in my face
    i never even tried to seperate
    for sixteen years you've dominated
    every single breath i take
    for you i made my family wait
    i hate you
    cigarette




    Submitted on 2006-01-07 11:01:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a really good and personal write
    I am sure by putting these thoughtds out in print you have captured that extra umphh
    You despertly needed to stop smoking
    Dont give up
    I can tell from your writes you have the strength to beat this addiction
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very good. I think that you made this addiction real by admiting what kind of hold it has on you. I loved your honesty. It made the poem more relateable. I don't smoke, but I do know how hard habits are hard to break, This had a nice flow and I liked the rhyme scheme. Nice job.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      tis a hard thing to do...especially if you've been smoking for a while...cuz it sortta just turns into an extention of yourself...yet a part of you that eats away at you physically and emotionally. keep on keepin on

    best of luck

    XOxoXO,
    me
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]



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