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    dots Submission Name: Painting a self-portraitdots

    Author: edthepoet
    ASL Info:    47-m-Pa
    Elite Ratio:    4.72 - 1476/991/125
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       my first poem since my neck and shoulder injury

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    dots Painting a self-portraitdots

    Painting a Self-portrait

    Can one truly capture themselves on a single canvas
    without the urge to airbrush the truth away

    Decisions, decisions, decisions

    What size?, what format? moreover, what story to convey?

    Shall they use deep rich textures of oil
    or charcoal pencils to shade the sad secret events of their lives
    Why not just throw paint on the canvas and let everyone else tell their version of it

    Once finished, will it be cherished by their children after they pass away
    or be sold at five different yards sales, until the curb calls its name?

    Always remember;

    The strength of your character has only one faithful stroke, hold it there as long as you can

    Edward K. Deputy

    Submitted on 2006-01-07 13:00:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thanks for giving me pause to look at myself and my character through your reflections. This is the kind of thoughtful work that good poetry is about.
    | Posted on 2006-05-07 00:00:00 | by feather | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't think that my whole being....and story....could ever fit on one canvas....I would need a whole museum....LOL!

    Sad....but I am serious.

    THis was a very overwhelming piece. I never looked at something in this fashion. I think that Picasso himself couldn't even convey such detail if one's portrait was to convey their WHOLE inner being.....

    Wonderful art....this is by far a masterpiece!

    Much love,

    LI LI
    | Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      for one thing, I LOVE ART. another thing I really liked your writing.

    "Can one truly capture themselves on a single canvas..." I love this line. amazing. I never thought of that. Now that i did. I believe you can't capture one self on a single canvas.

    i loved the writing.
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by WTF Zombies | [ Reply to This ]
      Great write,
    The strength of your character has only one faithful stroke, hold it there as long as you can.
    I am not sure how you came up with that but it is beautiful. You are a great writer, I eknjoy reading your works.
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by dustinamoody | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed the concept of this very much. It says a lot without spoon feeding emotions. Life is art in itself is it not?
    thanks for sharing,
    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by Swanne | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really nice, Ed. I found it to be an encouraging piece, with very good advice to us all. Life is filled with decisions.. choosing the right one is not always an easy task.
    I suppose life really is a work of art that we are painting each day of our lives.. and it's up to us how it turns out.
    I like the referral of the canvas and art as life.. and it being sold at a yard sale or cherished by those we leave behind.
    I'd like to think I will leave a part of me behind that my children will cherish.
    Thanks for reminding us to "keep the faith".
    | Posted on 2006-04-15 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a cool concept. I like the way you used the painting metaphor to describe life. I picture a blank canvas with one strong stroke and a bunch of people gathering around it in a gallery trying to figure out what the artist meant. That would be me, anyway. Misunderstood, I am!

    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]
      ooooh Ed this is Beautiful! i hadnt even realized that you had posted this and i am so glad that i stopped by to check...

    sometimes we forget these positive things, and you always help to remind and point that out... bravo Ed, just great!

    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! Yes...one faithful stroke. Yet...some can't find that one faithful stroke because of the stokes that are there over the top of it. That first stroke wasn't a mistake...it was the beginning of a masterpiece.

    I missed your positiveness. Glad that you are here to refresh one's mind!

    Much love Ed,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-01-18 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      "Shall they use deep rich textures of oil
    or charcoal pencils to shade the sad secret events of their lives"

    I love this. It's so honest. Painitng are funny things, we can paint ourselves to be something we're not through painitngs, through words, through music... through anything really.

    I'm looking forward to reading more from you Sir!
    | Posted on 2006-01-18 00:00:00 | by Eah | [ Reply to This ]
      I would be guilty of airbrushing the truths out...too busy trying to create a masterpiece rather than capturing the reality of me...

    This is wonderful write Ed. I'm happy to see you are back in the saddle again...

    So what would you do?

    | Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      could a single canvas ever hope to capture the essence of a soul? doubtful.
    yet, we only have one blank page given to us to capture our essence,
    and a finite amount of time to complete the work.
    the greatest work of art is a life lived true to one's heart and soul, and you've shown that quite clearly in your words.
    it's great to see you posting again, ed.
    your words of wisdom and reflection are always wonderful to read.
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      To thine ownself be true. People will interpret our lives the way they want to believe we lived it.
    I enjoyed this return poem of yours very much, Ed and it's so good to see you back again.
    You've been missed greatly here. Especially by me.
    Happy New Year.
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
      well there's not much I can say here that the reviwers before me haven't(unfortunetly)...but I just thought I should drop a few lines and tell you that the concept is very cool...however argueable...it is cool. In my opinion...people are 3 dimensional...yet with the right skill and interpretation...you can flatten the basics of a persons character and being onto a paper...:)
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]
      True... but...
    it's not as if I'd wanna...draw the me that I've created inside of my mind. The child, the growing-up-person, whose young and immature, who obseses over things,
    good or bad.
    How could I convery, with color, myself?
    I pretty much read this because I've started painting. I've been sketching since I was young. Time to build the skills and the artist's repritoire <3
    Thanks for letting me read the poem :3
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
      it's so nice to see you posting again, Ed. i've missed you.

    this is great... how shall we paint ourselves if we could? airbrush out all our foibles and character defects (which are what makes us who we are in the first place)? this is a very good look at
    examining ourselves and who we really are.
    what would we leave behind, how would we be remembered after we're gone?
    i love the last line because that says it all.. be
    faithful to who you are, that is what matters most...

    much love&peace for the new year,
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this.

    I love the metaphor and self examination.

    Once finished, will it be cherished by their children after they pass away
    or be sold at 5 different yards sales, until the curb calls its name

    This works for me on many levels.

    Nice work

    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      M thought provoking piece.
    The strength of your character has only one faithful stroke, hold it there as long as you can

    Interesting line that. One for me to ponder on me thinks.

    I like the way you let me into your world for a moment with so few words. I lived deciding what to paint with you.

    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]

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