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    dots Submission Name: Javadots
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    Author: KimmyMim
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 223/303/117
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Comedy
    Total Views: 781
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    Bytes: 684



    Description:
       Between the hospital visit Tuesday night, having my eldest sick, then me...now my 6 year old (who, poor thing...was sick...in the middle of the night...in her sleep! Ick!)...I have been without the aid of caffeine for several days...thought of this little number this morning while I was getting myself back into the "mother" routine! Enjoy!

    Oh...and I don't know what Fanfic is...and nothing else fit! LOL!


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    dotsJavadots
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    Gimme cuppa java (oh)!
    We are in desperate need,
    This blitzed, exhausted carcass,
    Is lookin' for some speed!

    Brew me up a potta (hey)!
    Ooooooooh, that's smellin' fine,
    Just git those grounds a cookin', please...
    Don't give me no hard time!

    Now, pour it in my mugsy (yes)!
    My mouth is droolin' big,
    Mine eyes are buggin' out my head,
    I'm needin' that first swig.

    Mmmmmmm...oh thank ya, kindly (wink)!
    I was in desperate need.
    Now watch me vacuum, wash and fold
    With endless lightning speed!

    LOL!




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      I love the picture with this one. I find it difficult to complete the task of getting up in the morning without my cuppa joe. In fact I'm a three cup a day type fella. Have you tried the new energy drinks, Rockstar in particular? I'm surprised the stuffs not illegal. I like this write a lot, it's got so much personality. I can almost see this bleary eyed drooling addict anticipating her fix and then running pellmell to do the chores. A very entertaining write, thanks.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-02-04 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Amen, sister, amen! This addiction to a legal drug must be appeased (sort of like posting on this site, but that's another monkey on another shoulder). This has a Jamaican feel to it (rhythmic, sinuous, seductive) and flows like early morning fresh brewed delight. I'm afraid I suffered with truck stop coffee for 12 years (it was chewable), so a fresh cup is always appreciated. Nicely done little love fest. Take care. Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      this sounds like me when i don't have my caffeine fix. i have a dependency on coffee, what can i say? i agree with paul, it was very relaxed and conversational (kind of like being in a diner and saying "hey, you! i want a cup of coffee, NOW!") wait, maybe that's just me, i don't know. this was a great write and even though it's late i could go for some starbucks... ...bb...

    XoXo
    ~Tayla~
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      oh my goodness, i can't believe that they censored the word S u c k e d! that's so sad. sigh. i'm sorry but that's a great descriptive word but if the world has come to this then the world has come to this.
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by osweetrepose | [ Reply to This ]
      Very amusing, my wife will most certainly agree with you on this one, although I just end up shaking alot and not much use to man nor beast, I'm a cup of tea man myself. Very well written and it moves along with ease. Cheers.

    TTFN
    V
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by Vastmark | [ Reply to This ]
      hahahaha this is classic.

    i work at a caribou coffee house, and i never get bored of the coffee smell. i love customers like you who sip their first sip of the day right in front of me, and that look on their faces are priceless. i would say it relaxes them, but under the smooth face electrolytes are shooting around, darting to and fro and brightening the dirtiest of faces. i loved the 'blitzed, exhausted carcass' part, it reminds me of war and crazy forest running. i also love the word mugsy. the only beef i have with this is the eyes popping out part, it gives your body a little too much life and energy and is therefor slightly inconsistent. i would never have gotten the vacuum wash and fold part if i hadn't read the explanation, but when i first read the vacuum part i thought you were going to say that [censored]ed the rest of the coffee down like a vacuum (my prefered method of drinking!)
    nice write!
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by osweetrepose | [ Reply to This ]
      lol, as ever very good. and amusing. 'This blitzed, exhausted carcass, Is lookin' for some speed!' I love the word carcass, empty of life, soul and energy. Love it. The whole relaxed language 'gimmy', etc. works perfectly. So much so I now have to make a cuppa myself, no kidding! I wouldn’t be surprised if every one who reads this runs to the kitchen to brew a cup. You better tell the electricity board to watch out for a sudden jump in demand! We will send oil prices above the 60 a barrel again! Lol.
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by PaulHudson | [ Reply to This ]


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