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    dots Submission Name: Old Scarsdots
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    Author: Saimi Marie
    ASL Info:    18/f/Columbia, MO
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 42/42/22
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsOld Scarsdots
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    Old scars, they only ache at odd moments.
    Sometimes when your alone, by yourself
    When your mind begins to wander in the
    silence.

    Other times your ina crowded room. One
    word, one touch, one movement will spark something deep inside you. Causing it to
    rise to the surface like yeast. Then the flame ignites, catching everything in its path on fire.
    Scorching it into nothing but ashes.

    Afterwards you are fine, the warmth of the
    fire has died leaving you almost unbearably
    cold. Now you take a deep breath, and shake
    yourself back to the present. Then you smile over at the person sitting next to you. Hoping
    they didn't notice what just burned another layer of your soul.




    Submitted on 2006-01-07 17:57:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed the way this poem moved to it's conclusion. Describes perfectly the ability of memory to bring back old hurts, realising how painful they still are. Some very nice imagery as well, but again beautiful progression... nice write
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by Universal | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this poem.It's very deep,shows alot of emotion and is well described in a little amount of words.Also this was well written.Godo job!

    ->Candace<-
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]
      good write, im all most in tears right now for i know what that is like, and you expressed it perfectly, i appreaciate your skill in showing how you feel.
    good job
    -phil-
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by morriscool4 | [ Reply to This ]


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