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    dots Submission Name: Shameless Plug ala Dork!dots
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    Author: Skinwalker
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 36/57/28
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
    Total Views: 752
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1086



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       Now that I have your attention...Go check out my other stuff on my page...Skinwalker. I have some candy for you. Comment on the rap what you will...I love to have fun and I still will!
    btw... Case 33: The Tooth Fairy pt.2 is being worked on...just wanted to let ya'll know!
    Ps. I just wanted to liven things up on Elite Skills.


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    dotsShameless Plug ala Dork!dots
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    Well...I can dance for you
    or I can read yiddish like a jew
    I can...I can... there's alot I can do...
    I can even freestyle for you!!!

    Freestyle:

    So you want to hear me spit freestyle,
    the kinda shit that'll make you go wild,
    well I'll warn you, my shit isn't mild
    I like to drop bombs like the shit in Vietnam
    and if you don't like it, go fuck your mom
    cause this is no pussy shit that I speak
    it's like a little devil that'll slap your asscheek
    fuck ya, leave ya, come back and eat ya
    until you had enough and shut my dumbass up!
    I like to take it to one extreme and back again
    from the land of Oz to the Easter Islands.
    I'll kiss your baby and walk your dog,
    then burn a paper bag with a log...
    where's the log at? It's in the bag...
    you give me a stick and we can have a lil snack.
    The bottom line of this Whack rap sort?
    I'm bored and felt like bein' a dork!




    Submitted on 2006-01-08 00:17:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm not sure what to think..you swear so much it brings away from the meaning and disgusts the reader. cut back on the searing and i'll try reading it again.
    | Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by Tabbie Kat | [ Reply to This ]
      ha ha
    I liked the last part;

    'I'm bored and felt like bein' a dork!'

    and only the last part. The rest of it didn't make a lot of sense and their was too much freaking cussing.
    I know some people say that ES is starting to get boring, or needs livening up, but I like it!
    I've only been on 118 days, maybe in a year or so, I'll get tired of it. Just Kidding!

    ok, the title is hilarious, and it's a funny idea, but I'm just not one for rap and stuff.
    I'll take Green Day over Eminem any day!

    at least it gave me a laugh, though

    Avril54
    | Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by Avril54 | [ Reply to This ]


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