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    dots Submission Name: 2 livewrite and die part 2dots

    Author: heavy knowledge
    ASL Info:    15/m/slidell, L.a.(N.O.)
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 106/156/34
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 880
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       part 2 the final chapter read it be happy

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    dots2 livewrite and die part 2dots

    Dedicated 2 writting like the crips dedictaed 2 there set
    Man u know the game u got to live and let
    Thats right let die make a moma cry
    Writtin my my niggas pac and biggie in the sky
    But i got 2 stop writtin for them gotta get hungry
    Hang so much niggas lable me as a monkey
    Then go home when the sun go down and write again
    People are gonna give me my respect when we @ the end
    A lil boy want his front 2's and all i need is 1 pencil
    1 pencil 1 pad 1 muse and that all my lyrical utuncils
    Lyrics so hot the scouldin these hatin men
    And my rhymes makin youngster fill with zen
    Pen and pads those are my 2 live peserveres
    The only thing i wouldin do for them is murda
    And 2 god i thank you lord for this gift much
    This that real talk if u ever heard such

    Submitted on 2006-01-08 18:59:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was not as strong as the first one, but it was still good. I liked the simplicity of it. I think that the end was where you picked up steam and made a impact with the reader. I liked the flow. It had a easy to follow flow and that was great. Overall, this was good. Take care.

    | Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      dog i didn't like this one. u word all ur raps funny, but i really wasn't feeling this one at all. u still type like a damn 3 year old,
    | Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]

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