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    dots Submission Name: My Wordsdots
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    Author: tmullins
    ASL Info:    37/F/Mo
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 127/149/41
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 981
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 758



    Description:
       just trying to say that if you really want to know me all you have to do is read my poetry.


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    dotsMy Wordsdots
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    I've written and read,
    so much to be said.
    I've laughed and cried,
    with no more to hide.
    I've fallen in love,
    searched heaven above,
    had my heart broke,
    my ego stroked,
    afflictions and addictions.

    I type away,
    night and day.
    On these pages,
    my life in stages.
    My dreams and fears,
    joy and tears.
    So you can see
    what's inside of me.

    If you want to know
    these words will show
    my life unfolds
    the story's told.
    Printed out neatly.
    Showing completely,
    the person inside,
    trying to hide
    from life out there
    where no one cares.




    Submitted on 2006-01-08 20:51:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awww this is really nice and really good. It has a nice flow, so its really easy to follow your thoughts and follow the path of your life. In this piece you show just how great your work is. I love reading your pieces because they always leave me feeling really good. Its like you were describing your life and you did it in a way that was very subtle so that it was part of your tapestry but not the main focus.

    thanks for sharing such beautiful words
    andrea
    | Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]
      No description needed! I understand everything your trying to put across from reading this piece, and your not alone in your thoughts, alot of the time its easier to write emotions down, before trying to put them in words to speak out loud. I feel that you had a real connection and sincerity with this piece and it gives relevance and personal emotion, which is a good thing. Genuine. Nice to know your not the only one who does it, ya no?
    Cheers.

    Mstr Rz
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by master raz | [ Reply to This ]
      What an amazing piece, this is the way i feel about my poetry. It's a way to share what you truely feel and leave a a kind of emotional autobiography. When i read back on one of my pieces i know exactly what was going through my head at the time and the things that were happening around around me.
    I really liked this piece it's kind of simplistic, but not in a bad way. You've created a brilliant little rhythm that while reading you can't help but read it the way you intended it to heard.
    Take Care,
    Danny
    | Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by corruptedspirit | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good and the rhyme scheme is excellent. When I read the poem, especially out loud, it's like a waterfall of thoughts spilling from a page. Lovely. Mel.
    | Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by litllost | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't think you need a description. It's perfectly obvious what your poem is about. Transparency of meaning is always a big plus. Consider not using rhyme or using less rhyme. Rhyme is a savage taskmaster that imposes its own meaning on a poem sometimes to the detriment of the poet's original intention.
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by hanuman | [ Reply to This ]
      Well Traci, I don't think you are in this one alone. From what I write and what I read I think we all for the most part have a problem facing the outside world. It is easier for us to come here and find acceptence. You can be yourself and write you most inner thoughts and feelings. I don't think anyone will judge you for that. All the fears and rejections are null here.

    This is a very streight forward write that allows the reader to see your true self. There is no pretense to it.
    I hope you keep writing here.

    Nicely Done

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this write, it's the epitome of the site and all the occupants within it. It means alot to know that you're not alone in your writes... sometimes when i write i feel like maybe im the only one... sitting pondering about the next line but you read something like this and it's clear, people everywhere are doing it, expressing themselves, putting their lives in words and on paper. enjoyed reading it. keep writing
    *thoughts*~jeni
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by thoughts | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, all I can really say is that you're not alone. Writing is definately the easiest way to say everything that you want cause no one can interrupt you. And sometimes putting the words on paper is much easier. The internet is good cause we're pretty much faceless here, and it makes it so much easier for me anyway to share all my feelings, and hardships and everything. I personally find that the honest writes, the ones that the writer is really emotionally attached to are pretty much the most sincere things that I have ever read. I know I'm a total stranger, but, if you ever need someone to talk to, I'm here if you want. Keep up the good work,

    Jessica
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by shmuzzelle | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, that last stanza certainly betrays the intent of your writing (to avoid socializing with the ignorance of the world in general). I'd say the sentiment is the same for most writers, what they've written reveals who they are (their concerns, fears, desires, hopes, etc.). This is about as straightforward as confessional writing gets. Keep submitting and take care. Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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