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I searched for you God

Author: Flamequill
ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77 /97 /35
Words: 142
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Average Vote:    4.3333
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Weird for me...I know but it's how I feel. If you don't like it tough, oh well I can't keep everyone happy. Bash it all you want, you're just bashing the truth. God loves us all not just Baptists, Catholics, Methodists, or Muslims, or Buddhists...he loves everyone and everyone should stop destroying his teachings through his prophets. (i e Muhamed (sp), Buddha, Jesus, the Saints, Emily Rose, et cetera)

Blessed Be

I searched for you God

I searched for you God
always looking in the world

Searching by practices
forbidden by lore

Never finding the answer to
What this life is for?

Searching in humans
the picture of your son

But I never found the light
of which the book says is in store

Instead I found you God
the one who loves us all

You never cared great God
what we did to honor you

The humans I looked in
were all just sinners

The picture of you God
is in Heaven forevermore

I thank you for showing me
the truth of the lore

That religion is nothing
we (follow) the same One

I wish we had realized
all those lives we could have saved

With this bit of knowledge
We could all love again

Submitted on 2006-01-09 10:41:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Yeah, a bit bumpy, but lovely nevetheless. I liked it. If it is an utopia, its a good one.
Whats wrong about writing poems involving ones utopia, when so many write about their hells?

I liked the fact that your stanzas had only two lines. It was very easy and comfortable to read it...
| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by ChrystalR | [ Reply to This ]
  I really look up to you for having to guts to talk about your religion, and your beliefs aloud. It was a good poem except that it was a little bumpy.
| Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice, um I think I would disagree with what you said about the Bible, but other wise it was an interesting opion. It is a beatiful dream your utopia, to bad it could never come true. Your line we the same one, I found stumbling. It did not flow so well, with a little oil you could refine your peice.
| Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by Kalis | [ Reply to This ]

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