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    dots Submission Name: I searched for you Goddots
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    Author: Flamequill
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77/97/35
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1668
    Average Vote:    4.3333
    Bytes: 922



    Description:
       Weird for me...I know but it's how I feel. If you don't like it tough, oh well I can't keep everyone happy. Bash it all you want, you're just bashing the truth. God loves us all not just Baptists, Catholics, Methodists, or Muslims, or Buddhists...he loves everyone and everyone should stop destroying his teachings through his prophets. (i e Muhamed (sp), Buddha, Jesus, the Saints, Emily Rose, et cetera)

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    dotsI searched for you Goddots
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    I searched for you God
    always looking in the world

    Searching by practices
    forbidden by lore

    Never finding the answer to
    What this life is for?

    Searching in humans
    the picture of your son

    But I never found the light
    of which the book says is in store

    Instead I found you God
    the one who loves us all

    You never cared great God
    what we did to honor you

    The humans I looked in
    were all just sinners

    The picture of you God
    is in Heaven forevermore

    I thank you for showing me
    the truth of the lore

    That religion is nothing
    we (follow) the same One

    I wish we had realized
    all those lives we could have saved

    With this bit of knowledge
    We could all love again




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      Yeah, a bit bumpy, but lovely nevetheless. I liked it. If it is an utopia, its a good one.
    Whats wrong about writing poems involving ones utopia, when so many write about their hells?

    I liked the fact that your stanzas had only two lines. It was very easy and comfortable to read it...
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by ChrystalR | [ Reply to This ]
      I really look up to you for having to guts to talk about your religion, and your beliefs aloud. It was a good poem except that it was a little bumpy.
    | Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice, um I think I would disagree with what you said about the Bible, but other wise it was an interesting opion. It is a beatiful dream your utopia, to bad it could never come true. Your line we the same one, I found stumbling. It did not flow so well, with a little oil you could refine your peice.
    | Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by Kalis | [ Reply to This ]


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