Description: This was something I tought about. How it is so easy to brake a heart, just as it is so easy to brake glass. So I compared the two and got this poem. Hope you enjoy it, tell me what you think and what I can change.
Short but perfectly done, a classic and often used comparison, that can never be used up, simple (which is ALWAYS best in poetry) potent and poignant ... loved it ... bravo ... bravo ... barvo ... michael
This is a really good poem, personally I sometimes find it hard to talk about something in rhyme whilst still keeping things subtle, you've certainly pulled it off here though. Good work indeed and thank you for your thoughts on My mind its good to see someone who can relate. Anyhow great write!
Your rhyme is wonderful - subtle and not too sing-songy - that's really hard to do (it is for me, anyway). The structure is tight and to the point - so many poets waste words and it's hard to be terse sometimes. Great poem!
Wow, I really like this poem. It is only too true that a heart is that easily broken I know exactly what you are saying. And as far as you needing to change anything, I think it is great just the way it is.
this piece was very beautifully written and i especially enjoyed the way you managed to convey such a sense of loss and sorrow in so few words. i often find that poetry written in short stanzas without overusage of words is the easiest to read. excellent job!
I think this was very well done & it is heartbreaking even 2 read! I like minimalism and this was just perfect to capture a subject that is always covered - if we had more compassion for each other it wouldn't be so easy to break Love,Peace,Joy&Smiles 2 share tif