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    dots Submission Name: Salvationdots
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    Author: OrionsStorm
    ASL Info:    18/M/VA
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 180/245/76
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 236
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1261



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       this is what happnes when I listen to PEarl JAm


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    dotsSalvationdots
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    the boy sits at home,
    all alone
    the trapdoor in his mind
    where he goes to hide
    mother's never around,
    father went away to another town
    the boy starts to cry,
    but no one hears,
    no one knows of his tears

    He searches for his Salvation,
    his wasted heart is crashing
    Crying alone is his room
    His life black too soon

    One day at school,
    a little boy cries,
    no one hears,
    a little of him dies
    One day in his shoes
    could be the proof

    Searching for Salvation
    Looking for his Providence
    where's he wanted,
    never found
    Searching for providence
    Looking for Salvation

    The boy is a man
    finally found his life
    lonely no more,
    the horror from before
    he dreams it all away

    And he searches for Salvation
    Still looking for his love
    for a warm bed
    and caring arms
    And he looks for his Salvation

    Salvation...yeah,
    searching,
    Seeking peace
    and he's so alone inside
    smiling outisde...

    Searching for Salvation






    Submitted on 2006-01-09 19:02:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I'm insane.
    I'm feeling gloomy, so I come to Eliteskills? Definately one for the asylum. Now onto your grim piece.

    I liked the last line, it was so defining. Of the song, and of life. So sad...
    I feel very depressed today. I might just shoot myself in the head to see if I'll smile when I do it. NO MUST NOT STRAY FROM COMMENT! Sorry for this...
    The piece had a good rhythm. I can hear the music. You have a knack for that. I wish I had your talent. Well not yours, then what would you have, but my talent was as good as yours. I wonder when I will learn the uses of backspace?
    | Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by Red_reaper | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this is realy good. I liked it alot. It remindes me of someone I know. I really like the lines
    "and he's so alone inside
    smiling outisde...

    Searching for Salvation"

    THat's my favorite part. Great write. Good job.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
      this is something i love and can relate to..especially "the trapdoor in his mind
    where he goes to hide" i do that alot!
    Keep on digging, you'll be finding gold soon!
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]
      like whoa...
    thats really cool and you already know that i know you're good at writing, especially lyrics. this is really good. its pretty trippy too but i like it.
    | Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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