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    dots Submission Name: Rescue Medots

    Author: disturbed420
    ASL Info:    20/f/wpg
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 36/35/15
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       A poem I wrote a little while ago... pretty self-explanitory, I think...

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    dotsRescue Medots

    I look through the haunting shadows,
    and I see your glowing face.
    I know I am accepted here,
    I call you my safe place.

    All this messed up confusion,
    running haywire through my head.
    If you hadn't rescued me,
    Death may've claimed me instead.

    It's all this constant commotion,
    that makes me who I am.
    My life is that raging lion,
    not the innocent little lamb.

    My light at the end of the tunnel,
    forever you will be.
    For if I hadn't met you.
    I don't think I could be me.

    Submitted on 2006-01-09 19:28:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yeah... Really nice poem. Uncomplicated, yet not lack of good phraces. Good use of rhyme!
    It fits nicely without getting "Standard".
    Sweet! Really.

    My favoutire line was :

    All this messed up confusion,
    running haywire through my head.

    I DO so much know this feeling!
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by ChrystalR | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really special! and i love it! its self-explanitary yes..but in a nice way! i loved "I call you my safe place" it just sums things up nicely!
    Keep on digging, cuz you'll find gold soon!
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good ryme scheme. This is a nice short little poem, and it is powerful. It also keeps the reader feeling the same things about their own loved ones if they have them, if that makes sense. Well either way good job.
    | Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by MaxHam | [ Reply to This ]

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