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    dots Submission Name: Poetry from bootcamp: number 1dots
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    Author: Semper Fidelis
    ASL Info:    22/Male/ouahu, Hawaii
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 135/185/60
    Words: 334
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
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       Um.. yeah. Boot camp sort of


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    dotsPoetry from bootcamp: number 1dots
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    My life-
    one step at a time-
    One failure after another-
    one wrong turn and here I am-

    Stuck!
    A once so outspoken voice
    muffeled-
    From inside I yell
    and scream-
    I scratch at the walls
    breaking off fingernails
    into the barrier of this fucking uniform-

    Pictures-
    tell of the past
    and fortell the future-
    They speak of who I was
    and who I will be-
    Of who is trapped inside
    of this institution of hypocracy-

    Where leaders preach
    the message I hate the most-
    "Do as I say not as I do"
    fuck you!

    I hate what you stand for-
    hate what you represent
    hate everything about this place-
    Regret that this was my
    only choice to succeed.
    Serve what?
    A country of swine?
    A picture definition of a superiority complex?

    A nation who slaughters it's own-
    Sends us to fight for some carpet-Bagger's cause-
    Welcome to Mr. Bush's gas station,
    ten lives per gallon-
    The price is high, wouldn't you say?
    You should see the price of bulk!

    Uh oh! Semper let it slip?
    Mr. Pettyofficer, bring on the Storm troopers!
    After all, we are only three steps away from nazism, right?
    Implementing complete gun control, overpowering the given rights of the American people for sake of Father- scratch that- Home land security and having the rich make the decisions for the people who they wouldn't be caught dead with, Us.

    What should we use next to bait
    the next batch of dying men?
    Faith in a twisted country?
    A wormy leader who hides behind his fake smile and who fills the heads of the weak minded with misplaced trust?
    The America I loved is dead, i found out.
    It died in the blood of my people-
    Now a monster has slithered from it's corpse,
    like an infection from a festering wound,
    reeking of bowels and death-

    My forefathers fought for a government
    that gave freedom-
    not take it away.




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      Wow, this poem really blew me away! It was just filled with this intensive anger...it was awesome! i'm totally anti authority! :P And i have to agree with jeffner, this was inspiring, political, and full of sarcasim! Here's my fave stanza(s) :

    "Where leaders preach
    the message I hate the most-
    "Do as I say not as I do"
    [censored] you!"

    That one, just made me laugh. cuz i feel the exact way about ppl sayin' that all the time! way ta be man! lol

    "Uh oh! Semper let it slip?
    Mr. Pettyofficer, bring on the Storm troopers!
    After all, we are only three steps away from nazism, right?
    Implementing complete gun control, overpowering the given rights of the American people for sake of Father- scratch that- Home land security and having the rich make the decisions for the people who they wouldn't be caught dead with, Us."

    So political, i love it! Great sarcastically angry piece. Intense. It was awesome! So anti authority! whoo hoo! lol. Hope ta see sum more from you! Keep it up!

    Kim~
    | Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by _NowOrNever_ | [ Reply to This ]
      I also was quite surprised where this started and where it ended. Very good writing. Many may agree or disagree that doesn't matter, overall it was good writing. I had a thought about one paragraph and this came to mind. They speak of who I was and who I will be of one who is trapped inside of me inside this institution of hypocracy. Just a thought. Keep on writing. God Bless, Dawn
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by Dawnyd | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a very hard hitting political piece that showed just how angry and disappointed even at the Bush government. It's definately not your typical political rant and that's what makes it such an amazing read. Good job.

    Kuddos,
    Jermaine.
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      when i first read the title, i thought "here we go, another rant filled with excessive obscenities and unthoughtful words."

    i was MUCH mistaken.
    this was inspiring, political, and filled with a satirical value that far exceeded my expectations.


    bravo.

    i was [censored] amazed.

    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by jeffiner | [ Reply to This ]


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