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    dots Submission Name: Wedding Vow (revised)dots

    Author: musclebound350
    ASL Info:    26/male
    Elite Ratio:    4.87 - 197/202/70
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWedding Vow (revised)dots

    mountains I'd climb, to get to her
    without you, life, is such a blur
    of one so beautiful, one so true
    these thoughts I think, are thoughts of you

    for you I hold, the one I love
    like a dove flying in the sky above
    that glistening sparkle, in your eye
    brings infinite joy, to be your guy

    these tears you see upon my face
    flow from my eyes, with love's embrace
    Here's to the joy you bring in my life
    all these thoughts, of a perfect wife

    Submitted on 2006-01-10 00:30:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very beautiful. vow from the heart and head,

    these are some very important words, it's so lovely that you have written them yourself... as some people don't.
    she'll have tears in her eyes you can be assured of that.
    it's really lovely. i don't really want to pick on anything in it or give u suggestions or anything... it's ur wedding vow and as long as it's from you she will love it. so good luck with everything. best wishes for the future.
    *thoughts* ~jeni
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by thoughts | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this... hope your wife appreciate it. I admire a man who is not shamed to say they shed tears. Anyone who reads this piece can picture the love you have for your wife. Continue loving. Take care, wanda
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]

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