Ozymandias lies buried,
along with all his great wonders,
'neath an ever-shifting sea of sand,
forgotten in the flow of time
save his name.
How much more quickly will I,
no person of note,
become only a memory?
I have no great poet to record my name--
to write me into immortality--
only my insufficient words,
struggling against the flowing sand.
This poem is very deep and very involved. I think we all question our own existance and therefore only natural to question our fate, our demise. It will always leave one with more questions though as the answers will never be known until you die. This is why I think people tend to fear death so much. They have so many unanswered questions and none have answers. We all know people who have died and they are gone forever, kinda scary to wonder what happens after death. I like how you tie the poetry into the ending lines too. One spelling correction needed for "insufficient" in the second to last line. Otherwise a good and thought provoking poem. Take care.
I like this write But ti me no man or woman ever diminishes from the Earth There will always be stories past down from generation to generation about a loved one I really enjoyed this God Bless Your Friend Ron
Need there be despair in death? What gives people life, purpose. This poem screams at me for some reason. I guess I just think of immortality as an unknown variable that would be either deleriously good, or enduringly painfully boring. Memories distort and forget- what would it take to be taught about in History class? Maybe trying to take over the world... but that's a little (only a little?) extreme. There's got to be another way... -Vas
i agree with the previous commentor, people will always wonder what will happen to them when there gone, will they live on through memories or just fade away. when you realy look at it you ask why am i realy here, great write and i must coment you on your picture. i am a big fan of brandon lee and the crow has to be my fav movie of all time, i also look just like him when i put the make up on,
Great write. Sometimes I wonder if how long it'll take before I become just another memory. And after a memory, then what will it come to? I don't know had to think deep-in-thought about it. Your write is very unique, maybe the fact it makes you think. I don't know, I can't put my finger on it. Good write though.