Jumping
I'm flying now.
Jumped
I'm falling now.
Are you going to catch me?
I used to be like you
A watcher,
A waiter.
Nobody caught me
You'll start falling too
Soon
And I'll be here to catch you
loving this! you've cought the mood just right! just because no-ones there for you, doesnt mean you cant be there for someon. is that what you were aiming for? lol, well, thats what i got out of it! its too short from my liking..but thats because i like it and want it to go on! Keep on chugging!
Welcome to the site. I liked the poem myself. I love poems that the words are so strong that you really don't have to say a lot. I agree with Kalinda that it ends on a very nice note, which is nice. Looking forward to reading more of your work. Good luck and God Bless, Dawn
Well, first of all welcome to Elite Skills, it's always good to see new users. Now, I like the poem, it's short, but it seems to say a lot without actually saying it. it's got a good ending, "and I'll be there to catch you" it ends it on a nice note, and I like that. Well done Regards, Kalinda
Submission Name: Falling
