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    dots Submission Name: Baptized into Deathdots

    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
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       Friends, don't try this at home... I wrote this at 75 MPH going down interstate 75 in Georgia. When it hits you, it just hits you. one must have a pen a paper or better yet... a digital recorder so the words do not go wasted. Not too sure what I am trying to say here except a homage to doctors?

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    dotsBaptized into Deathdots

    A Maestro's pallatable skill
    Begets confidence upon coronation
    Assurances conveyed subliminally, talent for resurrection. Again cheats the bastard angel.
    Alone, except unto his-self, within his battle parries the beast. Kept at bay, denies his prize.

    Earned grandeur portrayed as conceit misinterperted, misinformed, misunderstood

    The surgeon, the maestro, holds the source of his charge's life in his hands, the power of rebirth. He constricts the organ to restart a flame, holds life's pump in his hands.
    Now as a master garderner he
    replants, restores and renews
    the life a second chance,
    rescued from the precipice
    selfless conception is begun

    Submitted on 2006-01-10 12:56:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      To put it in a way that will not affect you at all, this reminds me of my brother's writing.

    That makes me superbly happy to have found it. So thank you.
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by notune | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed this piece for 2 reasons:

    1. it's simplicity makes it a quick yet concise read
    2. you used perfect wording to accurately convey the power held in the hands of one wo/man without overusing any one word. I definitely appreciate this piece. thanks for sharing!

    | Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]
      Great imagery in this poem. I love it when people paint a picture for the reader, it makes it so much more better to read. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      What a masterpiece. Such wonderful imagery to convey the work that a doctor does. It is absolutely beautiful. A maestro, warrior, and angel all rolled into one. Wonderful. This is going into my faves list.
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]
      This must be about an important family member or friend and the ability for them to enjoy a second chance due to medical advancements and care. I hope all is well and send wishes of healing
    I've done the same thing while driving & I did used to carry a tape recorder & it helped! Use it or lose it!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smiles 2 share
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      i don't understand the poem.. but i really enjoyed reading it.. it shows that you are serious about your poetry.. and ur right.. when it comes you have to write it down.. good write..
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by soul full | [ Reply to This ]
      Are you hispanic by any chance? You appear to have incorperated many words of the spanish language, well for the most. I do not want to approach you as over pompous, but the deal is that you need to work more on your writing "skills" it wasnt so bad but you lost me alot here. It didnt even sound like a story.

    There was no organized fromat either. I hope to hear from you again.
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]

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