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Submission Name: I Write At Night dots

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Author:	corruptedspirit
ASL Info:	26/Male/England (Swindon
Elite Ratio:	5.38 - 160/185/56
Words:	110

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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< Shrugs shoulders >

I Write At Night dots

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I have all this words jumbled inside my head,
Funny how they only seem to join whilst i'm laying in my bed.
Although tired and trying to rest,
It's when my poems sound thier best.

So i get up and proceed to write,
Eyes straining, the lights to bright.
Yet i put pen to paper and jot down my stuff,
I try to finish the next day, but alas nothing is good enough.

So all these half written pieces scattered about my place,
I can't finish the words my hand began to trace.
Odd little rhymes about all different things,
What can i do with these rhyming strings?

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  Wow, so very true! same with me! i have tons of half finished poems and sometimes just a few lines! I think this is true for ALMOST every poet out there. I like this piece alot! thanks for the enjoyable read!

Kim~
| Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by _NowOrNever_ | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this poem. The simplicity of it reminds me of something that was forced but skill still alowed it to sound and look good. Your a good writer, but I myself try not to write poems that I just "wrote to be writting them" on the site. Not because I don't think they're good (and I'm not saying this because I don't think your poem's good) they're just too blah most of the time. But being blah isn't the problem in this poem, it just doesn't seem to have a real purpose to any but yourself. Though I do find that poems seem to flow better for me at night.

It's a good write just use better judgment
Ghost
| Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by Ghost Child | [ Reply to This ]
  This is the ongoing curse of someone who likes to write it seems. lol. You've definately portrayed that well though. I could almost see you stammering out of bed, dragging yourself to the desk to write a few lines, eyes half open as the words just flow from your pencil.

Very nice piece :) I enjoyed reading it, and very much enjoyed the way you served it up.

Until next write,

SorrelsReality
| Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by SorrelsReality | [ Reply to This ]

"I have all this words jumbled inside my head,"
Only problem that really sticks out besides the afore mentioned, is that "this" should be "these."
Now, this is something I know I relate to, and am sure many else do as well. However, myself, I don't bother turning on the lights. Sometimes I write in pure darkness. And othertimes well, I use a small flashlight. The night puts many writers in a mood, an aura fit to our creation time. I don't like to disturb what naturally comes.

"I can't finish the words my hand began to trace.
Odd little rhymes about all different things,
What can i do with these rhyming strings?"
This is my favorite part. Not only is it completely true, but you chose the word "strings" which I hadn't thought of. That really added more to your voice. Overall great read. Keep it coming...
| Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by mywordscutmetoo | [ Reply to This ]
  interesting poemm, not like anything I've ever see before. The rhyme scheme works well and the poem just seems to flow through my mind, i mean this is very true, it speaks on behalf of all poets, damn, you seem to have nailed it lol, good job here

Holler!
| Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by Writer Chic | [ Reply to This ]
  You don't sound any different than most writers I've met; you write at night when the mind is relaxed and you lose inspiration before many of them are finished (save your scraps, they may fit nicely into other works in the future, or develop into something different in the daylight). Think of everything you write as exercise for a masterpiece, and it may become easier to deal with unfinished bits and pieces in the future. Nicely expressed. Take care. Bill.
| Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
  I connect with this so much - since i am the same exact way - I think this peice is very flowy keeps up the beats - i enjoy it very much keep on writing at night cuz clearly something is working!
| Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]
  Ha reminds me of me and many other poets who are trying to sleep and get something in their head. Of course we jump out and start writing like THIS IS THE greatest POEM eveR!... wait... oh shoot how did that part too?

I should have written something about that, but you beat me to it you creative person you. Keep up the good writing.
| Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by acommoncold | [ Reply to This ]
  Not bad at all. A few typos though. In the first line it should be "I have all THESE words" instead of this words. also change "poems sound thier best" to "poems sound THEIR best" change "lights to bright" to "light TOO bright" other than that I can relate to the poem. Pretty decent structure. nice going.
| Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by FosterKid | [ Reply to This ]
  Sounds very familiar, although my wife would have something to say if I put the light on in the middle of the night and started writing stuff down.
I tend to do most my notes whilst at work sometimes it's easy and sometimes I really have to force myself to write a basic sentance even if it's crap I can usualy use something which is why I don't believe to much in writers block. You can always write something, just because you can't finish 2 or 3 poems every night doesn't mean you're stuck, like some people seem to think.
Thanks for sharing

TTFN
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