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    Author: ArtichokeMosher
    ASL Info:    15/F/PA
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 146/201/81
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 213
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 844



    Description:
       This one is rather short but it's all I was able to come up with.Life had just been going down hill for me lately and it just really sucks.Stuff goin on with friends and at school and parents fighting constantly...it's hard :(


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    The life she once had washes away with rain.
    As the bloody rose she was handed falls down the drain.
    She comes to the conclusion that she's gone insane.
    And tonight she dies of all the pain.

    The memories of her past flash before her eyes.
    As she breaks down and cries.
    Tonight in a bed of black roses she lies,
    Of all her pain and misery she eventually dies.

    This pain was too much for her to take.
    The only thing she had left to do was break.
    Anything she had ever done turned into a huge mistake.
    And tonight she sleeps and will never awake.


    Say goodbye to the broken girl on the death bed.
    Drownded in her own pool of crimson red.
    With nothing left to be said,
    The poor little girl lying there dead.




    Submitted on 2006-01-10 21:16:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was good a very enjoyable read easy to understand and had a good meaning ti the thought process
    great write
    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      This was beautiful. In the beginning I didn't think I would like it because of the rhyme scheme. (Because very few people can make that peticular rhyme scheme work well.) but you did it very well. It flowed wonderfully. The words had sort of a song like flow to them. I have few words at the moment. But your poem had a beautifully sad concept and it was a very wonderful poem.
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]



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