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Lice & Mice

Author: mrmundane
ASL Info:    20/m/vancouver bc
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i don't really think i have to describe what this poem is about, i hope not anyway...

Lice & Mice

Wrapped the knot that time forgets
Draped around and through the frets
Is tales and lies which men receive
Tales meant to trick and drive deceit
Through the fabric thick of lice
The spice which taints the fickle mice
When the lice are spoiled unduly brave
They'll trip and fall
But few shall cave

When seas burn
And wind dies
We'll all feel sad and cry our eyes
If not the pokers of these toils
Had been allowed to rape the spoils
Which hurt the founder
Mother Earth
To whom we owe our beds of mirth
Her gentle woes of pain and cries
Overshadowed by politic's blatant lies

Vermine those are
Who accept this fate
Pleased with spoils which take from their plate
Lest ye forget
Such things are free
Vermine are better than that you see
Vermine are better than you and me
They live for respect of the Mother Tree
Which binds the worlds of the Outerverse:
It's roots reach deep within our Earth

Submitted on 2006-01-11 00:06:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This again is such a dark poem. I really liked this one though. The first I was had way more emotion, yet this one is written perfect for what is it about. You are really a great poet. Seriously think about getting some of your work published, I know I would read it. Good job!
| Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
  This was very well written and you seem to have a wide scope - I liked this better than the other.
I appreciate poems that make one think and this flowed very, very well lyrically.
I like the political and socio musings and comparisions - & the title is right on.
Love,Peace,Joy&Smiles 2 share
| Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  yeah I do hate the sheepishness of people... they should stand up for what's right, and not let themselves be caught up in what they know is wrong and goes against their grain.

... eventually it will come and bite us in the ass if we keep standing back in the wake of oppressive dictators and manipulators like George Bush and Kim Jong Il. Or people like Tony Blair who are just greedy mindless puppets... who do nothing in the way of change. These people aren't leaders. What leadership have they shown us? They claim it's perfectly fine to kill thousands of innocent people in the name of anti-terrorism, and pretend poisoning the Earth will have no negative effect, acting like it's just a lifeless rock. But they let people like Osama Bin Laden go free, because he was just a tool to gain envy over other leaders and trick the public... they aren't helping anything. As soon as one of them nukes someone, the other one's going to nuke them, and then another is going to retaliate, and our world will be over.
| Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by mrmundane | [ Reply to This ]
  that was a really deep and stirring poem that makes you look at yourself.. by comparing our race with something that we would normally shun and react with in disgust and whowing our imperfections in contrast to theirs is a real eye opener but do i sense a hate for the general sheep of humans?
| Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by unnatainable | [ Reply to This ]

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