That was funny @ the end - I think the flow was a bit off - I believe with the way you have it formatted with the small lines they need to be more impactful - don't worry so much about the rhyme just make each line count - so it's not so disjointed. Good & we just keep on...Love,Peace,Joy&Smiles 2 share tif
I liked this poem up until it said you were going to eat a steak with your knife. I would fix the ryhming and maybe the words a little to, but it was still good. Great job, revise and then send this my way!
I honestly enjoyed that. & Maybe I shouldn't enjoy it because its about cutting and stuff. But I enjoyed the detail of it. But once again something I could relate too.. Even though I don't like admiting to that.. Bla... I enjoy it a lot. Just.. I just hope its not true.