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Him (1)

Author: AmazingForever
ASL Info:    16
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This is another poem about him....
No one knows who he is... Except me.
But he's my best friend.
I go to school with him.. But we don't talk.
It's more like online and stuff...
But I know that if ever I need anything
He's the person I turn too no matter what!

Him (1)

Lost and confused in this crazy world.
Not always sure where I am going, or what I am doing.
Just praying that I will get bye.
If ever I am scared, I go to him.
He helps me understand.
He doesn't realize what he does for me.
But he gives me the ability to be who I want to be.
It feels like he knows everything about life.
He makes me feel like everything's right.
If anything is ever wrong
He plays me that silent song
Even though no one can hear it, it makes everything right.
He helps me understand without saying a word.
It's the most beautiful concept
In the entire world.

Submitted on 2006-01-11 10:23:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  great job too bad no one else knows where to find a "HIM"
Where are you from coz the people in the picture look familiar?

| Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by lashelle | [ Reply to This ]
  Wait I do know who HE is..
I think.
This is a very sweet little poem.
I think that we all need a "Him" to help us by.
Good job.
| Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]
  this is such a sweet poem. i like the flow and topic. but the first three lines kind of jump out to you when you first read them. maybe you should try rearranging
| Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by MKAT | [ Reply to This ]

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