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Author: realpassion
ASL Info:    27/Male/Nigeria
Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 81 /70 /50
Words: 336
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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THE VERDICT (love Ritual)
The light that shines
Amid gloominess
Has again shone to rebirth
A dawn like today...
This days' judgement came hastily
Upon two culprits;
--One as guilty as the other
Whose offense could only
Be described in literary dialects.
He was the love of her life
And she was the comfort of each
Moment he experienced.
Two brave hearts mutually
Resolved to write their names
On the rainbow;
For a celebration.
Ah! she sighs: ''The sacrifice
Of declaring open my deepest affection
And love is worth more than a thousand
Rites that I need perform...''
But he confesssed:''The spell which held
Bound my heart was mixed in the concoction
Of your spicy name...''
Alas! In split seconds
Solitude saw them speaking
In lovers' tongues;
Never to mention whispers
Which two alone could tell...
Each moment worked for the good
Of 'His and Hers' 'till passions
Got so robust to erupt
Like a vocalno.
Now, the law-maker can only
Be appeased if this ritual
They perform.
A love ritual which has been
Prescribed as the basis
For pardoning their love guilt.
A verdict!
An irrevocable verdict!
No choice had Kingsley and Comfort
Than to yield to this judgement
And to these radiant faces;
An audience,Suspense-drowned
Who by freewill chooses to
Be eye-witnesses of this event
May your heart be soft enough
To let your eyes write down
This precedent.
And this message may you pass
To our generations unborn
Today January 14 2006...

Submitted on 2006-01-11 21:07:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Again you do it. You made a poem that for some reason shocks me with how good you are. You would think I'm used to it by now...
You put all my poems to shame again.
And finally, you made me think hard and long over all that is in your poem. Also you made me consider if I will one day become Hippopotomonstrosesquippedaliophobic reading your poems. I have a decent vocabulary, but always using it does take a toll on my meager brain.
| Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by Red_reaper | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow! that's just...Wow! Your use of words for this poem is extremely amazing and it fits the poem perfectly. good job and keep up the good work!
| Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by eMo_AnGeL | [ Reply to This ]
  i loved how u used a old fashioned word choice and order, it really helps the flow when you read the piece! the only bad thing i will menton is that you didnt title the piece...but thats just being picky! :P
Keep on digging, your getting to that gold!
| Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]
  wow besowreess lol- thats gd- like the words u use thats like puts the like emoticonal touch to it and also the poetry touch- u shld write more poems like this one- gd work! (Y)

Peace Out MAn

:) Me xx
| Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by MysterydarkPoet | [ Reply to This ]

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