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Confessions Ofa Teenaged Heart


Author: Hip-Hop Honey
ASL Info:    16/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105 /86 /31
Words: 222
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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I wrote this about my ex in the middle of the night.....I don't really feel this way but at the time I did I guess :P Anyways hope you like it


Confessions Ofa Teenaged Heart



We had your ups
And your downs
We made each other smile
Made each other frown
We had fun when we were together
Now were apart so let me tell you
The story that has risen in my heart
I loved you like you loved me
We completed each others sentences
Thats why I thought we were meant to be
You made me smile you made me laugh
Hanging out was a blast
You kissed me slowly you kissed me true
Thats when I figured you loved the blue
Before we got together you knew
That I was not the easiest person to get close to
Yet I let you in guess it was because I loved you
But then things changed all in a flash
I was getting scared to scared to face the fact
That I loved you so I left you
With a broken heart tears runnin down your face
No longer would I be in your embrace
Now these feelings are coming back
Yet I'm with someone new who I like it's true
Yet I don't think I really got over you
Today you called and I heard your voice
It made me smile made my heart rejoice
Then it got my heart to wondering
If I made a mistake
And should run back to you once again




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  I like this piece truely unique to your own style of writing, yeah alot is written on this subject but your fits to you snd your own heart and I really enjoyed it I love the flow and the rhyming, A heart must write what it's feeling and you did just that with your own words. I like this one.
| Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked this piece. it was a poem but th rhyming had kind of a hip hop vibe to it. the poem's flow kinda reminded me of a nursery rhyme. it was cool though. i enjoyed it. and i hope everything works out for u. no matter who u wanna be with
| Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  ..yes, this topic is widly used, but all topics are, what makes this special is the fact that its totally unique to YOU. i didnt understand the line "you loved the blue" but you really have got your feelings across :D
| Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]
  It is a good peace, that shows the representation of confusion between wanting one or another. I do agree with Lana thow it wasnt realy original, but who can control what you are fealing at the time. It was a good poem and it is nice to see that you strive to type from your fealings, the way a true poet should be.
| Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]
  Well the troth is that I didn't like this piece that much. Because this is justwhat everyone else has written about. The words have been all used up before. I consider that in poetry people have to strive to be original and I'm sorry but I don't see that in this piece. Maybe if you channel the feelings you may come up with a better piece of work. Sorry.
| Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by Lana | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm sry to say but I agree with Lana up here I know u just write to get ur feelings out but I do think this is just a really overly used topic and the way it was written was kinda all over the place it rytemed soetimes it didn't sometimes and I also don't get the line "you loved the blue" it might mean something inner to you but i just don't see the conection with the line and the poem it could of been much better it was just about a topic that is overly used and words that have already been said but keep writting

-Logan-
| Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]


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