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    dots Submission Name: I Lovedots
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    Author: HaldirLives
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 234/149/60
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 758
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    Description:
       Another Shakespearean attempt. I'm noy sure whether to put it under prose or poetry, though. I suppose it's more like a soliloquy from a character, so I'll call it prose.


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    dotsI Lovedots
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    I love. I do, I love.
    This alliance I have with him –
    This agreement knows he not.
    Yet, with faith in my heart, I made it.
    This thing aches me,
    This cruel thing. Ah! My friend!
    No, more than that,
    To me. To him.
    To him, I must go. To tell!
    I shall tell him
    And unburden myself!
    No price, I think naught of post!
    Oh, he shall embrace me,
    He shall kiss me passionately,
    In my mind’s eye. Aye, my mind’s eye.
    He shall agree, there,
    As an imagined thing passing at dawn.
    No more! No more!
    My heart, my soul,
    My lips be still!
    I shall care no more.
    He never shall return it.
    Others are there,
    Young men always yearning
    Are always flocking here.
    I shall endeavor –
    To put my affections at naught!
    Shame! Shame, my soul!
    You would so selfishly
    Cast aside your deepest desires
    Without thought of the heart!
    Aye, I would – for fear.
    ‘Tis the sin that would
    Bind my tongue and beguile my wits.
    Of what, I know not,
    Only that haste is a thing
    Not for this matter.
    For relief from this malady,
    I would my soul sell. No,
    Not that, but my heart.




    Submitted on 2006-01-12 04:40:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i was saying I liked the peice despite the fact that i do nt like shakespearean themes and u captured his style well... sorry i was on my way to bed when I wrote it.
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      not bad for a shakespearwan theme.. i am not too much into h is peice and the lines
    This agreement knows he not. sounds like something he would have written!!!
    say why.. but its an impresive peice.
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the war going on here. "Tell him! No don't!" It makes this more interesting than just saying "I wonder if I should tell him?" Usually I dislike poems written in this kind of language, but I find it very fitting in this poem (maybe it's all growing on me in general?).

    The ending is very interesting as well,

    "For relief from this malady,
    I would my soul sell. No,
    Not that, but my heart."

    Is this meant to go along with the theme of the heart and soul combating eachother? That's the impression I get but I thought I'd ask for sure. It's as if the heart is saying "I'll sell my soul" and the soul is saying "No, I'll sell my heart."

    Very interesting piece. I liked it. :)
    | Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by Ierra | [ Reply to This ]


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