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True Love

Author: Dawnyd
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Words: 226
Class/Type: Lyrics /Serious
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This is a poem to my kids. Not sure about it or the title. I welcome the feedback, good, bad, and/or ugly. Thanks.

True Love

You are a very special child indeed
I am so glad that the Lord gave you to me
I would never want to change one thing
I thank the Lord daily for his giving
I always try to be a good mother
To nurture you, guide you, and try not to smother
When you are a parent then you will see
That being a good parent is not as easy as it would seem
I know that I have made many mistakes along the way
I cannot change the past but I can change today
Being a parent is truly a gift from above
When you are blessed with a child then you will see what a wondrous love
Each and every child is unique and special in their own way
Your love for them will grow stronger each and everyday
I pray that you will learn from the mistakes I have made
Hopefully the mistakes you make will not be the same
Everything that was done was truly out of love
You may not believe that but in time confirmation will come
If I should die before we speak again
Forgive yourself and allow your heart to mend Remember that we all make mistakes that never ends and is nothing new
Just know one thing for certain my love for you was always true

Submitted on 2006-01-12 11:17:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is cute. But I would have to say if you Classified it as lyrics then brake it up a bit so it is more into a lyrical type of poem. I really like the concept of this though. I am sure being a parent is a truely wonderful feeling. I gift from above as you put it. I love this, it's so soft and gental full of emotion. Truely wonderful.
| Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
  aawwe, this is so cute. ;P

I wanna be a dad someday, i think it'd be so neat. to help lead him to question disect situations/problems in help grow into something amazing. you seem to be a very caring mother. i enjoyed your piece thoroughly and i thank you for sharing.
| Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by Cannablisjunkie | [ Reply to This ]

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