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I am

Author: suicidal_chick
ASL Info:    14/f/TN
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Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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I think this is a poem that describes me very well.All of my poems on here are my own work so please dont still them.But tell me what you think of it.

I am

I am a poet writing of my pain.
I am a person living a life of shame.
I am your daughter hiding my depression.
I am your sister making a bad impression.
I am your friend acting like im fine.
I am a wisher wishing this life werent mine.
I am the girl who thinks of suicide
I am a teenager pushing her tears aside
I am a student who doesnt have a clue
I am the one asking you to care
I am your best friend hoping you'll be there

Submitted on 2006-01-12 16:37:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  it may not seem like it now, but life gets better. dont make the same mistake i did: drop out of school and get addicted to drugs. keep writing its the best escape there is.
| Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by vohomegirl | [ Reply to This ]
  This definitely reminds me of middle and early high school years. People just cover up their feelings during those years and "pose for the camera." Have faith...things changes when you get out of school. You can remove yourself from the pettyness and immaturities of your classmates and create your own world.
| Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by Lynda | [ Reply to This ]
  wow this was good again, and im starting to think your poems just make you think your not like wow that suck or wow its good. but this poems gonna now be in my mind all night. its something i can realate to and others can too, see how that works. have a good one xox
| Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem is very true many ppl go through this everyday me being one of them and you put it in words amazingly I really liked it the only part I'd try to fix is the 9th line it was just out of the flow of the poem everything else was with a rtyem and this just stuck out to me but everything else was perfect I loved it keep it up

| Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this. This is sounds exactly how I used to be. feeling and thinking the same's kind of weird. it's.. so close. I think it is good. and I'm glad you have a way to express yourself. it seemed to help me some. I think I'm gunna have to add this to my favs and look at some more of your stuff.
| Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
  Even though it says prefered from others nothing I must say this: Teenagehood and High School or younger is a very tough time in life. BUT what does not kill you only makes you stronger. Suicide is too easy, if you ended it all now you would not be able to get to live out life to the fullest. I too was once suicidal but I realized it is selfish to want to commit suicide. Just a few words of wisdom, I went through it all trust me.
| Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by MaxHam | [ Reply to This ]
  THat was a good write, and I want you to know that you are not alone. Don't be afraid to reach out if you need a friend. I was suicidal at several points in my lifetime. It's rough. Keep fighting though, and know that you are not alone. God loves you and is with you.
| Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]
  ur not the only one who feels this way,trust me.
i liked how it flowed so well and how you wrote "i am" in the front of every is short and may need some improvement to make it longer or anything else but i cant think of anything.
u are only one of if u ever feel alone,
u can always talk to me.
take care,
| Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by Haunted_Nobody | [ Reply to This ]

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