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    dots Submission Name: Oh Moondots
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    Author: KelseyJo
    ASL Info:    14/F/MN
    Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 15/13/12
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Dark
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    Description:
       I was feeling down when I wrote this. I had had a bad day and I felt ugly and mean. What do you think? Can you relate?


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    dotsOh Moondots
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    The sun is setting now,
    And I turn into the monster I've become.
    This happens every night,
    under the full moon after the setting of the sun.
    What did I do, to deserve this fate?
    I'm so ugly, is it never too late?
    Maybe one day I'll look in the mirror,
    and I'll see a beautuful sight.
    I'll see a face as beautiful as the sunrise, and
    as beautiful as the night.
    But there is no hope for me today,
    I'm always keeping my tears at bay.
    Oh, moon, oh, moon,
    can you help me at all?
    Oh, moon, oh moon, I'm staring to fall.
    If only I could be you, oh moon, so high,
    so high, in the sky.
    I could see every one else and no one would see me,
    Oh moon, oh moon, why?




    Submitted on 2006-01-12 20:05:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is how i feel at night too! lol, you wonder at night what you can do to make things better. i have that feeling. this really expressed the hard to express points! i salute you! my only problem with it, is that its short! lol, anyways, Keep on digging, and you'll find the gold!
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good poem, except for the flow at one point whent off. Never mind reread it and saw what happend. Was wondering what happend to the rhyme scheme but then saw the punctuation. This is a extreamly good write, just wondering what you see yourself as...
    | Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]


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