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    dots Submission Name: Heart of Glassdots
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    Author: MyFairCalamity
    ASL Info:    17**I'm a lady**philly
    Elite Ratio:    7.1 - 115/67/16
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsHeart of Glassdots
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    A heart's a truly fragile thing,
    like glass,it's genuinely easy to break.
    Be careful who you trust your heart with,
    with whom your loving bonds you make.

    Make sure the ones you think you know,
    are worth the risk of a broken heart.
    Because,one day, you may come to see,
    that when broken, glass stays apart.




    Submitted on 2006-01-12 20:09:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Kate, this is almost picture perfect, the poem is exactly what the title promised.

    A nice warning...love is fraught with danger, and we tend to throw our hearts away so recklessly...ahhh love...

    two small points (very tiny) truly, and genuinely are the correct spelling, and put a comma after broken in the last line.

    Only tiny picks, I quite fancy this, nicely done!

    be happy

    Graeme

    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey there. I just love this poem.

    'A heart's a truly fragile thing
    like glass,it's genuinely easy to break'

    I really like the analogy of a heart and glass--really does visually show you what hearts are really like to many people, easily broken and hard to fix--Nicely done. I'll add this one to my favorites. <33

    ~Steph
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by xXCptn_SephyXx | [ Reply to This ]
      "Make sure the ones you think you know,
    are worth the risk of a broken heart."

    I don't think anybody is. People are horrible.
    Who needs 'em?

    (heh.. bad mood today lol)
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Good Morning!

    First of all, I would like to thank you for the comment that you gave me regarding my piece "Nerd." I appreciate it, and I'm glad that it had an impact on you. Thank you.

    As for this piece of yours, I know that I already commented on it, but I felt I had more to say. lol!

    Simple and to the point, yes. ...just as I said before. Sometimes, depending on what the writer is writing about, that kind of writing can be flat or hollow. However, I found this piece to have great feeling.
    It really makes you feel your heart. ...at least to me anyway. How you ended it, with the line: "that when broken, glass stays apart," was a perfect way to do so. That line makes one visualize what happens to your heart.

    Personally, I have had my heart broken before, once. In my previous comment, I simply said that I was "a victim of the truth" that you displayed in this piece. I'll elaborate on that... It literally feels as if your heart freezes over, shatters into an oblivion. Your entire body begins to ache, and you slowly go numb. You can try to mend it, glue it back together... but nothing will make it stick. You just keep going. Maintain passion, but become increasingly cautious. ...or skeptical.

    In writing such a short piece, although simple, I still got a great deal out of the words, the meaning. Thanks for allowing me to "recomment" on this piece of yours. It was a good piece! *smiles*

    I'll be checking out other pieces of your soon!

    Take care.

    Crystal

    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by purely_complex | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the fact that this piece is short and simple. You cut all the unnecessary details and went straight to the point.
    It's definitely true... I'm a victim of the truth myself.

    Nice piece.

    Crystal
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by purely_complex | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with bambi..it's a great poem and a useful type to many people...I can relate becuz this is what I am always aware of myself...later
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by Hip-Hop Honey | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem really works! its a poem/ warning/ user guide of love!
    these are very raw emotions coming through..did you get this from a personal experiance?
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Kate
    1st, i promised all new users i'd give them a cake... so
    (i believe this is the 2nd one you've gotten from me... ohhh and there are many more to come. its the only picture i know how to make lol)

    Ok, now on to commenting...

    So, I've read that like a thousand times, but I never actually realized how sad it is. (You know I'm emotional.) I like the second half the best. I don't know why.
    Stupid glass! All the super glue in the WORLD can't fix SOME things! Grr.
    lol woooh... bitter... heh... but anyways, thats pretty. You're awesome.
    lol Byeeee Kate

    -nikkki
    (duh)
    | Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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