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    dots Submission Name: Sleepy Lullabydots

    Author: Halston
    ASL Info:    20/female/carlsbad,ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 72/71/30
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSleepy Lullabydots

    Maybe it's normal
    to talk in your sleep.
    there are so many words
    you didn't have the time to speak.
    Is it the body's reaction?
    Are you so full captive thoughts
    that you must purge them somehow?

    I'm sure you sing a lullaby.
    Maybe a love song,
    the kind that twist your arm
    the type everyones hanging on

    My eyes are closed
    but I'm still awake
    listening to the little sounds
    that make the earth shake.
    I guess it's all just a painfull reminder
    of the life I once lived.

    Submitted on 2006-01-12 20:19:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You can get back to that Life you once had
    I am living testament to that
    I was destroying myself with drugs and self pity and God reached down and blessed me letting me know I didnt need Drugs to find Love
    Look carefully at your Life and you will see the Love that is there for you
    I will be Praying for you
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    | Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I know what you mean in the beginning but near the end I sort of lost track. It didn't make sense to me. I thought the start of it was good *repeats herself*...
    I do love opening.
    "Maybe it's normal
    to talk in your sleep.
    there are so many words
    you didn't have the time to speak."

    The rest of it didn't seem like..
    it fit.
    but that might be just because I'm braindead.
    | Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]

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