First impressions... I think 'perpetually' is the wrong word. My first reading told me 'perpetual' is what you want there. You might want to check some of your punctuation. I don't think you want a period after 'cheater'... maybe a :. The thought doesn't end there... it continues without forming the end of a sentence. Also, the comma in the third stanza makes it sound like you are starting a list as opposed to clarifying the image.
This one definitely took my fancy. As cheesy as it might sound this kind of reminded me of the ending of the third “Nightmare on Elm Street” particularly regarding the last stanza which was my favourite.
As for critiques, I'd that I didn't really dig the line break concerning lines 6. Also, try to even out the second line of the second stanza. And you made a typo in the second line, by the way.