[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Everything Reminds Me Of Youdots

    Author: faln_angl
    ASL Info:    25/f/MN
    Elite Ratio:    4.66 - 99/96/17
    Words: 656
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 975
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2359

       To my good friend.........who came and went so fast I didnt know what was right in front of me.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsEverything Reminds Me Of Youdots

    the new doctor on general hospital,
    adult swim on the cartoon channel,
    every time i poke a oney,
    and remember laughing at things not funny,
    the way you'd crack up & look like you're cryin.....
    how you made me forget about ryan.
    the turkey we had to bathe.......
    on the morning of Thanksgiving day......
    that we forgot to defrost..........
    cuz we just got way too sauced.
    I'm reminded of you everyday
    No work, all play
    I had so much fun...........
    fallin in love
    And just couldnt admit
    till you were gone.
    you'd spent ur money on a bong,
    kissed dreams of home so long.
    daily hold 'em tournements.....
    i'd make you play with all the chips,
    its the little things i miss
    you, my southern gentleman,
    my sweet down home mountain man,
    who tried so hard to let me win.....
    missin shots again and again,
    playin pool at the starbar on central
    i never realized your potential......
    that day i learned I'd be a mother,
    me drinkin 7-up, you, a Budweiser.
    I'm reminded everyday,
    No work, all play
    I had so much fun,
    fallin in love
    and couldn't admit
    till you were gone.
    then drinkin Greenies at the bar,
    me so drunk I almost spilled my heart
    but by then it was too late,
    you'd soon be on a bus out of state
    I didnt tell you before you went away
    but i lost the baby and my heart the same day.......
    when you comforted me,
    said it wasnt meant to be..........
    ..........about the baby........
    i never told you my feelings........
    And I'm reminded all the time
    How fast you came, then left my life
    no work, all play
    falling for you everyday
    And to it,
    I still am unable to admit.

    Submitted on 2006-01-13 01:38:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      flow seemed just a little forced but it was still a good story to follow...

    always live like there might not be a tomorrow...it's never promised...one thing i've learned in my past failed relationships is if i'm feeling or thinking something i'll say it then and there...no balls no glory...because i've had too many of these experiences...could have should have would have...


    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm sorry to hear these things, it would be very rough to try and handle all this at once.

    Great write, you expressed yourself well, I really got a clear picture of the two of you. Be brave, you only get one chance most of the time, so take it when it comes around.
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is soo great...It is so relateable yet at the same time you keep it very specific to you. I can see a lot of the things that my boyfriend and I went through in this poem...I loved it...
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by haileebobailee | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very beautiful heartfelt poem...Althought it was sad and i'm sorry that you had to go throuh what you did..the line that i can relate to is : had so much fun,
    fallin in love
    and couldn't admit
    this line reminds myself of me in the past...anyways great write absoultey beautiful..later
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by Hip-Hop Honey | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent! This is completely amazing...it was like reading a miniature story, and those are my favorite types of poetry. Serious talent here...give my page a look sometime, I try to write in the story style too :D. 5 Stars

    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by OrionsStorm | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i cant really say anything else but wow lol this is a great poem i loved it i can realate to it i agree with sugar
    "kissed dreams of home so long"
    i love that line cause i can relate to it
    great job
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by James Wiffy | [ Reply to This ]
      "kissed dreams of home so long."

    this is a great line. I loved this poem. It was very heart-felt and so so sad. Beautifully written. It made me smile too. Well done, and welcome to the site
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by Sugar | [ Reply to This ]
      Welcome to Ellite skills! i liked this poem, and its great that you managed to keep the poem on your subject! i liked your use of imagery and i can really relate to this poem! keep on chugging!
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    It's been a while written by Sharati_hottie
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Linger written by saartha
    You Make Me speechless written by elephantasia
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    To written by SavedDragon
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Giving written by jjd
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Bond written by saartha
    May 31 2018 written by Chelebel
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Summer Nights written by ollie_wicked
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    A Sonnet for Nina written by SavedDragon
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]