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    dots Submission Name: Bravery in Blackdots
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    Author: rocknpoetrychik
    ASL Info:    20/Female/Someplace
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 331/281/44
    Words: 28
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 256
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    Description:
       simple to the point, i didnt need to add i like the simplicity


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsBravery in Blackdots
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    Paint on my fingers,
    Braving Black Friday,
    Inspired to create,
    Once again at the easel,
    Easing my way into the feel,
    Brush between my fingers,
    Canvas becomes real




    Submitted on 2006-01-13 03:17:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice how the art becomes real. This is short but you make the poem flow well with what you are trying to say. I like it!

    It encourages me to keep going and write even when I am full of emotion and nothing to say. thanks
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by aprilrenee101 | [ Reply to This ]
      How about:

    *Fingers stained with paint*
    it makes a nice slant rhyme with create
    and I think it might improve the flow.

    I like "at the easel,
    Easing my way into the feel"

    I like this piece,
    it speaks to the wanna be artist in me :)
    Nice Work!
    Nicely
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      Is your easel perhaps a notepad and your brush a pen? This appears to be an introduction to a long, productive bout of poetry (I'm hopeful that's what will become of these sketches of your latest experiences while you were away), and I'm looking forward to some powerful imagery in the near future. Take care and keep submitting. Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the simplicity as well.
    I think if you continued it it could take away from the feel.
    I think the way you have it right now is perfect.

    "Easing my way into the feel,
    Brush between my fingers,
    Canvas becomes real"

    Keep Painting. Keep Writing.
    -Caribou-
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      I like what you've got here a lot, but it doesn't feel complete to me. Maybe you should continue it? Maybe give an insight into your creative process? Just a thought.

    Peace,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]



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