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    dots Submission Name: Visionarydots
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    Author: brich2929
    ASL Info:    30/M/Delaware/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 27/18/10
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Political
    Total Views: 169
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 566



    Description:
       this is the original that I mentioned earlier.


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    dotsVisionarydots
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    Like I'm floating on a sea of water
    Which exists only in the fourth dimension
    The music of our friendship
    grows painfully distant.
    The walls are closing in--
    And the tide is turning.
    Phaser set to stun-the political nightmare of a house in hell,
    a train in vain.
    ...the dastardly deeds done in by the puppets of a ubiquitous forlorn society.
    The only thing left shimmering
    is the glitter embedded into the skin of a showgirl-
    An anticlimactic decoration.
    A cover for the pain.




    Submitted on 2006-01-13 05:26:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      yea this was short but stilll great you could of went into a lil bit more details but it is stilll good and i know how you feel it happens to me sometimes
    great job
    Jenn
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by James Wiffy | [ Reply to This ]
      its short, but i still like it! i think that you could have expaned on it, but it works well as it is!
    i particularly like the "the walls are closing in"
    it made me shiver! and i can realate, because i get into that mood!
    Keep on chugging!
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]



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