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    dots Submission Name: Childhood dreamsdots
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    Author: AmazingForever
    ASL Info:    16
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 12/18/7
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Childrens
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       Wrote this for class.. Nothing big.

    Not my best I can tell you that.

    <3


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    dotsChildhood dreamsdots
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    When I was growing up
    I wanted to be a princess
    and I wanted to live in the clouds
    With unicorns and faries.
    I wanted to get away from "Him".
    He would yell, He had a problem...
    I wanted to fly away with
    My pretend friends and
    My baby brother.
    Now "he" is gone.
    But my dreams are now reality.
    My unicorns and faries have turned
    Into best friends.
    The pretend ones have become real
    And my clouds have turned into colleges.
    Childhood dreams are gone
    and my new life has begun.




    Submitted on 2006-01-13 11:07:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ive always liked this poem.
    Hey remember skipping creative writing after the PSAT to write it?
    That was cool.
    Well anyway I love the transition from begining to end where the unicorns were friends and castles were colleges!
    Very creative!
    :) .Amber.
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww.Don't ask me how poetry could be cute but this poem is cute and if it had cheeks(ones of the face mind you)I would squeeze them.Sorry...had to make it humerous.I liked this poem it shows what children dream of and how it comes true.If you think about it thats exactly how it is but I dont think many people realize it.This gives out a good message to readers.Good write.

    ->Candace<-
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]
      
    awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww lol i liked it i liked the way you keep he and not put the boys name it and allow us to pick on who u taking about yea not the best that you can do but still very very good
    ~Jenn
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by James Wiffy | [ Reply to This ]
      Like you said not your best stuff, however it is not all that bad. A cute enjoyable read. Never let a certain perception keep you from putting thoughts (however random) down in ink, one never knows...

    your friend
    ben
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      This is sweet. I like how you talk about you childhood dreams and don't really explain who "he" is, that leaves the reader to deside who you might be talking about. This is a good poem and I enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]


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