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    dots Submission Name: What could have beendots
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    Author: SouthrnQT
    ASL Info:    24/ Female/ Florida
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 290/271/31
    Words: 334
    Class/Type: Story/Passion
    Total Views: 1614
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    Bytes: 1891



    Description:
       This happens to be an erotic type of story or fantasy if you must, that I'd written for someone. Reading it brought back so many memories, and though sad, I still have to smile, because I remember how I felt the day I wrote this to him. This is what could have been.


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    Darkness......we lay there on my bed, the white satin sheets glowing from the blue tint hazed through the window, the moon showering us with it's soft light. Your hands run over my skin as you slide down my form, fingers gingerly flicking over my nipples as they move, grasping my waist, holding me down as your tongue wetly caresses my bare skin, finding hidden treasures between my thighs. You gently nudge my legs further apart as your tongue burrows inside of me, tasting me, drinking me down like a fine wine. My moans almost melodic as I rise and fall in pleasured peaks until you bring me to the brink, my body tight, shock-filled, ready to overflow with desire, wanting you to bring me to the edge, then pour me out, to let me ride the waves of this journey you've brought me on.....But no....you pull away, your hands still roaming free upon my nakedness as you crawl above me, kissing your way up my form, lips brushing over my tummy, my breasts, my neck.....You whisper in my ear how much you love me...then you ask me.....how much do I want you?

    My breath is broken, my eyes closed, fingernails still dug into the sheets pulling at them to calm my wants.....Please take me I sigh as my body rolls up and down beneath your weight, urging you to break me, to set me free from this climactic burden I now carry. And so you do....Pressing into me slowly, my body taking you in as it wraps tightly around you, throbbing, aching. I cry out as you enter me, combining our need for each other, building me back up again, branding me, making me yours.......

    And like a volcanic eruption, we cease to hold out any longer.....releasing together, floods of raw emotion, combined with a fluid embrace as we swim into each other...you rock me down slowly, the electric waves subsiding as we fall into a satisfying slumber, still merged...as one.




    Submitted on 2006-01-13 12:12:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very good passion poem. You describe what could have been so very well and I cant help but think that you have gone over this moment over and over in your head. It is never easy when you lose someone you have been in a relationship with. It is very painful and disappointing, but I have learned through my own experiences that everything does happen for a reason, and even though you cant see it at the time, a new door still opens in front of you. And most of the time, you move on to better things. Try not to linger in the past for too long, it isnt worth it. There will be many more men ahead and probably you will be happy that this happened in time. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      You are amazing with erotic pieces. I've read a couple of yours and you do a great job of keeping them erotic without going overboard. You tell one hell of a hot story! You are an amazing writer and I will have to check out even more of your work. Great job!

    Candi
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, one things clear. Whoever he is, he's a moron. LOL

    To things scream out this at me. First, your incredible talent as a writer. I've dabbled with this kind of story and it's tough to write about sex without being shallow or corny as hell. You've written a piece here that is very erotic without being cheesy.

    The second thing that's obvious is that you're comfortable talking about sexuality in personal terms. That's a pretty rare trait these days too.

    Good job!
    Steve
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]
      A very intense and image filled piece, i rarely read stories that are posted but today i felt like a change and stopped by here, and i'm glad i did. You've created a piece not just about sex, more about making love and you've done so a t a very high standard, i mean it made me post comment.
    There is only one thing i could offer you that might strengthen the piece a little, there is just one word that stuck out and it is still wirring around in my head now "Wetly" it really doesn't fit with the rest of your carefully executed words. My only negitive point about the whole piece.
    Excellent write,
    A Loving Hatred
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by ALovingHatred | [ Reply to This ]
      Awe...Awe...Awe...this is a wonderful story. The intensity is so extravagant. As I was reading I put myself into the piece. This is one touching masterpiece.

    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by B-Gentle | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. This is such an intense story. I love it. It is just like so many times I have enjoyed with my fiance. I am just sorry to hear that you wrote it for someone who sounds like he is no longer prevalent in your life. This is amazing. It is one of my favorites.
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]


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