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    dots Submission Name: nightly visitsdots

    Author: EV2884
    ASL Info:    21years/female/michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.88 - 53/48/15
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       as the same as the others just wanting to know if it's any good

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    dotsnightly visitsdots

    as i soar through
    the night sky.the
    light is closing in all
    around me.i make a plea
    please don't take the
    darkness out of my heart.
    the cold hearted they are
    invited to come over
    to take this pain away
    that this light infilcts
    on my heart.
    i am not letting go of
    this darkness i love
    the way the darkness feels against
    my skin and my heart.
    i am not giving up on this night
    i want to keep my cold heart
    that guides me to you
    in the dead of night

    Submitted on 2006-01-13 13:37:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think there could have been more
    between the last few sentences.
    But it's your poem
    and if you're happy with the way it is
    it's not mine to judge.
    I really beautiful write all in all.

    Blessed Be!
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by Dearest Heart | [ Reply to This ]

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