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    dots Submission Name: heresydots

    Author: EV2884
    ASL Info:    21years/female/michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.88 - 53/48/15
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 797
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       just wanted to know if this poem is good or not

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    god was created
    by hypercrips that
    preached to everybody
    that does the wrong
    thing ordoes something
    bad but gets praised when they
    do it.they call it religious justice
    but i call it murder.
    when the bible says that women
    are men's slaves that we
    have to serve them and
    their need and killing children is right
    to them.well that's still wrong
    and that's why i don't praise that god
    i praise lilthe the first woman to
    stand up for or rights
    so thank you for giving us
    the courage to take that kind of stand

    Submitted on 2006-01-13 13:45:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Organized religions and societies in general tend to want to keep the people scared & down but there is good in the world & in our hearts/souls & that is our journey.
    Perhaps just spell check & that helps in the read. Good start!
    Happy Friday 13th it's really lucky!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Creepy...It's a good poem, and I can understand what you mean by men making crap up, but you have horrible grammer, horrible spelling, and the end is just plain stupid, please take no offence.
    Feel free to bash some of my poetry if you like ^_^
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by Queen_of_spades | [ Reply to This ]

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