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    dots Submission Name: Colored Sands of Mandaladots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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    Description:
       I watched some monks working on a Mandala - I like the discipline and the beauty in color & form is amazing & at the end of 7 days they destroy it after all that careful work and sprinkle the sands in a river, creek or lake.....to me "IT" represents that like the great bang theory we are those colored sandz and as we are dispersed our color isn't any less beautiful - IT is what IT is sometimes individually sometimes collectively and to me, I feel like we are all a part of "IT" always - that original sand painting.
    Enjoy life & love
    Love,Peace,JOY&Smilez 2 share
    tif


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    dotsColored Sands of Mandaladots
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    A rainbow of colored sand
    a vision of a distant land
    now creations guiding hand

    en
    cir
    cle
    ing

    "IT" IS
    then "IT" IS NOT

    & then "IT" IS Again

    The sands a rainbow
    stretched across the
    river




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      Nice work, Tiff, you have captured this idea quite deftly. But the beauty of the sand mandala is felt in the moments of creating it. So any attempt to save it would be in vain, the actual joy of creation has passed. Telling our egos it is beautiful doesn't seem to work either, because it is a function of ego and not the present moment.

    Have you ever seen the movie Kundun? the one about the Dalai Lama? I saw it in the theatre and it's magical. Good luck on your new endeavors.

    Love, and blessings,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-01-18 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you did a great job here Tiff. I like the way you kept to a few words used in this poem. It made it more powerful. It made the reader think and feel the connection with the sand that continues on in life in many forms. this was delightful and deep to read. Great job.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      One of your most focussed to date I feel. Very insightful, with a wealth of meaning built into and around it. Very good.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Tiff,

    I really liked this. 1st you provide a verse with really nice flow. Then you dive into an e
    cummings thing that fits perfectly. Great Write! Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by oixi | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiff, your poems should be on a banner, on a wall somewhere, so one can sit on a bench, and gaze at each word, to really appreciate fully what you say.

    The story behind this one is blessed indeed, and your style simply emphasized the beauty and inevitability of "it"

    excellent

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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