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Submission Name: will you be there dots

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Author:	EV2884
ASL Info:	21years/female/michigan
Elite Ratio:	2.88 - 53/48/15
Words:	79

Class/Type:	Poetry/Dark
Total Views:	168
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	470

Description:
just to see if anyone likes this poem

will you be there dots

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i am taking my first step
towards the darkness
will you be there
waiting for me.
will you embrace me
praise me for making it to
the darkness.
will you be there
waiting for me.
telling me how much
i mean to you.
will you tell me
that i make you proud.
will you be there
waiting for me.
to tell me that i am
not alone in the dark.
will you be there

Submitted on 2006-01-14 11:21:10 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow this one is great. i like it cuz in the first 4 lines u tell the reader "oh im going in the dark and i want to kno will u be there", or along those lines...lol. well its very good i like it! like i sed b4 keep it up!
| Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by eMo_AnGeL | [ Reply to This ]
  This was good it was kinda short but got the point across it had a semi-orignal idea you could add maybe some descriptive words like infinite darkness or soemthing like that but it was a good poem none the less keep it up

-Logan-
| Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]
  These "teen angst" thing become so popular topics amongst the poetry society. I wonder if they're something else than anger and tears everywhere???But despite of my words i give you 5 thumbs up to your poured emotions.
| Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by Soldier O_Tears | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey cool poem. I enjoyed it, it's short and simple to understand.

I am taking my first step
towards the darkness
will you be there
waiting for me.

I like how you started, it tells right away what you are feeling. I wrote some thing called: Waiting light, It's different from yours because it's about getting out of darkenss. i hope you check it out.

Be happy!
| Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]

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