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    dots Submission Name: IF YOU SEE KAY (A CHESSBERG)dots
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    Author: Psyve
    ASL Info:    50/M/ Out there
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 69/101/59
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Lyrics/You left me
    Total Views: 172
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1200



    Description:
       This one was written sort of as a Sunday Cryptic Crossword. It contains clues, names and symbols ....that probably mean nothing to anyone other than me.


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    dotsIF YOU SEE KAY (A CHESSBERG)dots
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    IF YOU SEE KAY (A CHESSBERG)


    Our Tukid has ridden a Chessberg away
    On a grammical Aziph turned down-
    Your Chessberg’s an iceberg, the Queen tried to say,
    But iceberg’s a nice burg to hang round!

    The King has turned blind, disappointment and spite,
    The tip of the iceberg and money;
    The Queen’s awake, worried about mating all knight
    On a diet of bread without Honey

    So, if you see Kay, if you see our Kay,
    If you see our Tukay-Tukid,
    Tell her the Queen has abandoned the scene
    Of the Save-our-King-from-himself bid!

    Our Tukid’s a King, playing limited moves
    On a board dominated by nights-
    The Queen has been beating out timid tattoos,
    Unheard, since she’s lost all her rights…

    So, the King takes his ice and the Queen takes her song
    To their separate beds every night,
    Each trying to say, Oh, if you see Kay,
    I’m really feeling all right!
    I’m feeling all right,
    The feeling’s all right,
    The Queen is all right,
    The Queen was I !
    I’m feeling all right…






    Submitted on 2006-01-14 13:53:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Unfortunatly, your right about who it might have meaning too. How ever, I get impressions of Chess and the Alphabet from this piece and I'm trying to fit it together in my mind.
    I think the 3rd line of the 2nd stanza would read better... with a more even flow, if you turned 'about' into just ''bout'. On reading with out music your rhytm and meter feel abit awkward and off, but I'msure adding your music to it evens it out.
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by DavidHirt | [ Reply to This ]



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