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    dots Submission Name: Image in the mirrordots
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    Author: The Conqueror
    ASL Info:    21/female/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.48 - 178/204/42
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1130
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       I was thinking about how much I stake in my physical appearance, and this floated out. I hope you enjoy it.


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    Looking in a mirror
    I see myself as you do
    I see my face, my hands, my hair
    But does this mirror hold true?

    How do I know, that in your eyes
    I look the same as here?
    And when the mirror sees happy smiles,
    Do you detect a tear?

    How can this thing of shiny glass
    for the truth-be trusted?
    How can this object state so much
    Even worn and rusted?

    I just can't seem to understand
    How we stake so much in this
    A silly figment of ourseleves
    -The point, I seem to miss

    Don't rely on a thing of glass
    To, of your beauty, speak
    -An item in your dressing room
    That's neither strong nor weak

    So ask yourself, what do you see
    When you look into your soul
    Is it the image in your mirror-
    Is that what makes it whole?




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      This is absolutely charming, and has a wonderful philosophical message as well! The structure, story, and rhyme scheme are near perfect! Bravo! You have done well with this!
    | Posted on 2008-03-20 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, vanity, vainity, thy name is... a fine and most potent poem here, indeed! most well and most ably done throughout! I liked it muchly! bravo... bravo.... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-03-20 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      You have such a way with words! How do you do it? Sorry haven't commented on you in a while. Haven't been around ES for awhile... until 4 days ago :)
    Uh, I always hate when they tell me to critique writing, cause I can never critique on yours. What can I say? You're a good writer!
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by Aelfled | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this...so many peoples lives revolve around a mirror and what they look like, you did a really good job with the rhyming lines and making everything sound good together
    | Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by Suicidalgurl | [ Reply to This ]
      Mirror mirror on the wall...
    Beauty is in the eye of the beholder and your take on questioning the function of a mirror was very well put together. A very insightful piece of writing.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it.You're telling people to believe in what they think they are and not to follow what others say.You get that point across without beating around the bush.I would post more but I'm really tired.Write On!
    | Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by giver_of_death | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I've never really thought of the mirror in terms of it simply being a piece of glass, always in terms of it's function. You also give it a character. 'when the mirror sees' ... ' don't let the mirror judge you'... Very clever.

    ~scienceyear~
    | Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by scienceyear | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this poem it says so much about what everyone must go through at some certin point in life. The "mirror" gives an image but like you said what you see isnt always hpow you feel. I liked this poem it says a lot but some of the ryming states are a little out of wack, im not saying that you should fix it because it is perfect how it's written. Thanks for read my comments and good luck to you.

    ~ms.understood
    | Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by Rehian | [ Reply to This ]
      The poem is very nicely written. I thought is was meaningful in what you were talking about. I believe that the metaphors were well written. But unclear regarding if you were talking about yourself and how you view yourself or how others view you. The picture you provided was very dark to me and makes me think that you don't think to highly of yourself. Sorry, if I'm am wrong, please interpret the real meaning. You are a very yound and intelligent soul with so much room and so much time to be the very best at what you do. In overall Great Job!
    | Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by RECKLESS | [ Reply to This ]


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