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When the night begins

Author: curiosityskitty
ASL Info:    31/F/TN
Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 149 /149 /30
Words: 168
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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When the night begins

In my dreams he comes to me,
His voice calls out my name,
And though he smiles so lovingly,
His eyes betray his pain.

He longs to hold me close to him,
And shelter me from fear.
He yearns to never let me go,
And always keep me near.

Every night he sings to me,
His lonesome lullaby.
His seductive, haunting melody,
Is one I can't deny.

He whispers ever softly to,
My fragile, broken soul.
His words of promise comfort me.
In his arms I am whole.

But nothing lasts forever.
I can see it in his eyes.
The time is drawing closer,
For him to say goodbye.

He says to me Now I must go,
For soon the sun will rise.
But look for me and I will come,
When the moon is high.

Sleep now my Love, do not despair,
Soon we will meet again.
For I am yours and you are mine,
When the night begins.

Submitted on 2006-01-14 21:56:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  oh my gosh i love this. your wording was beautiful and just the whole thing was great. i also liked the theme of it the thought that you were giving comes through so clearly its just awsome. great job
| Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow sent a chill up my spine. Truley one of the best i have read so far. I could tell that you where in love with someone my interpratation was kind of split. Either you where writing fiction in which you are in love with a night walker (vampire, spirit ect.) Or you are in love with someone that your not aloud to have so simbolicly you meet him when no one can judge your being together at night. Kind of a romeo and julet kid of romance(without the suicide) Either way very inticing. Most exslent write.
| Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by DiamondTears | [ Reply to This ]
  Seems like you're in love whether or not the person is still with you or you both have moved on, that I don't know.Rhymine every other line is a nice touch.I'm sort of getting tired otherwise I would post more.Sorry but Write On!
| Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by giver_of_death | [ Reply to This ]

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