my mind spins and twirls with wonder not understanding whats going on around me.not knowing if this is what i really want. felling so disorented inside one minute wanting to cry and the next feeling hate my feelings have pushed me so far they are what makes my head spin. often times memories from the past haunt me. i find myself seeking something better but once it is in my grasps i release it just to find my self lost once more the spinningness never stops. i hurt inside and sometimes i dont even understand why. help me to escape please someone anyone stop the twirling of my feelings release my hate and help me get what i upmost disiar just please stop my mind from the spins and twirls of my heartache.
This is a very good poem. It emphasizes confusion, by having a lot of feeling at once. You do use the word "spin" a lot tho. Overall Very good job. x caroline
this entire poem made me dizzy! I liked it except it seemed you used the same words over and over again, kind of a turn off. No offense, Im just trying to be honest. But otherwise, it was very emotional and relatable. Good job!
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