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    dots Submission Name: Land of the single parentdots
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    Author: toyysruss
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 494/336/134
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Rant/Longing
    Total Views: 1119
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    Bytes: 1027



    Description:
       really fast.
    my fingers been broke=i gots into a fight with a garage door=it won

    lol


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    dotsLand of the single parentdots
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    A curse was apon the land.
    Where's my mommy?
    And where's my daddy
    From sea to sea

    One's on judge Judy
    And the other one's in jail
    "I know I just sent,
    the check in the mail"
    Is all that you hear.
    All you want is their ear
    And for them to take away all you're fears
    Not themselves

    Baby's daddy
    The phrase produces bile.
    Deep in my throat.
    I choke
    I'm that baby's momma!
    Then why do you act like this,
    on Springer?

    Is this what's in store for me?
    I copy what i see.

    A curse,from sea to sea
    And i don't
    And my vision is not impared
    You have to be around me for this,to become
    All these feelings of comming undone.
    Come in tremendous waves that knock me down.
    On my face
    On the land of the single parent








    Submitted on 2006-01-14 23:32:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hhumm.. I am a single parent but I have never been on any talk show and I know who my babies daddy is .. but yes it does happen and there are many teen pregnancies and I think this was cute and creative.. be everyone has a different story.. but I think you meant this to be funny and it to me wasn't nit picking

    peace & smiles
    Penny
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not really sure what to say about this. My mom raised me and my brother, and she did a wonderful job, but she got divorced. I do think it's hard, and it's not always the ideal environment for a child (Sometimes one parent is abusive or has some other reason to be unfit). I know you probably mean teenagers that go out and have kids because they think they want a baby only to find out it's not like having a Furby. I think the Judge Judy/ Springer thing is a bit exaggerated because most of the single parent families I know are pretty normal. I do think it's far too common, and I don't really think it should be done if it can be helped. I really think a lack of caring parental involvement is more of a curse though. To pick a teeny nit, coming only has one "m." I hope you're well, Amy
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      Apart from the obvious social comment, I think this is a very interesting piece.

    A poem that makes the reader slow down and ponder on what's what is always worth reading, and this does that and more, with its multiple references to talk shows, with a cynical bite behind the reference.

    Very nicely done, and out of the ordinary, which is always great to see. I'd be proud of this.

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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