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    dots Submission Name: Such sweet sindots
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    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 238/273/176
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 800
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1289



    Description:
       well basically this is self explanitory...nothing really to be said but when i say butterfly i'm making refference to a tatoo thats on his chest over his heart...for whatever reason i had to make that clear....tell me what you think.


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    dotsSuch sweet sindots
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    Your body curves to mine
    in perfect bliss in mind.
    Your soul entangles me
    like vines.
    Your eyes entrap my cores divine.
    Each moment flaming passions burn
    grow stronger with every word
    a look in the eyes
    the absolute wrong turn
    the connection on high so many nights
    gone dry
    my lips on yours the feeling so sweet
    in the act of sin
    Iíve never been so weak
    control I gave it all to you,
    my soul my body it never knew.
    You make me yearn for the bitter sweet,
    for your love dear heart ache I will always beat.
    Your body molds as eyes meet mine
    soul entangles words run dry.
    Sensation rising
    worlds collide.
    My love for you will never die
    tears of water red as wine
    your heart beating close to mine.
    I rest my head upon your butterfly
    you lay your hand upon mine
    never before have I felt so cleansed
    after committing such
    a sin,
    never before have I felt such innocence
    after committing such
    a dance as we did.
    Your body curves to fit mine
    your soul sleeps in the mind of divine
    our worlds connect
    our love shall never die.





    Submitted on 2006-01-15 03:32:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like this.
    I can just feel the passion in it, and it makes me think of my boyfriend and , those moments.

    nice work.:)

    "in the act of sin
    Iíve never been so weak
    control I gave it all to you,
    my soul my body it never knew.
    You make me yearn for the bitter sweet,
    for your love dear heart ache I will always beat."

    This is perfect.
    theres alot of emotion in just these few words.
    Your good.
    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by SetmyselfonFire | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it! So much heartfelt emotion it was beautiful my fave line is :after committing such
    a sin...this line means alot to me in so many ways and I know it means alot to you to in your own way..And I hope things work out for you
    and this guy with a butterfly :P...anyways later
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by Hip-Hop Honey | [ Reply to This ]


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