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    dots Submission Name: Little Miss Insanitydots
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    Author: xmangaXfreakx
    ASL Info:    13/f/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 31/30/22
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 873
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1121



    Description:
       I wrote this the other day. I know it's short but I'm going to add more.


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    dotsLittle Miss Insanitydots
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    Insanity struck me tonight,
    with her golden fist.
    I tried to slice my flesh,
    cut my wrists.
    And I don't know why I'm feeling so blue.
    But I think it has something to do with you.

    Just call me Little Miss Insanity,
    and stick me in a cell.
    Just press that elevator button,
    and send me back to hell.

    You're so different now,
    but I still love you somehow.
    I mean, I've known almost my whole life,
    and now you're both gone.

    Just call me Little Miss Insanity,
    ad stick me in a cell.
    Press that elevator button,
    and send me back to hell.

    I'm just your dumping ground,
    aren't I?
    You got a new best friend,
    and you said it to my face.

    That's part of it,
    I just know it.
    We were "bffs"
    But I guess forever ended a long time ago.

    But I don't blame you,
    I blame me.
    Because who would want to always be by
    Little Miss Insanity?




    Submitted on 2006-01-15 09:58:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow evrybody hates this i guess lol ummm it wont let me submit so I guess maybe say some good things? gee idk i guess...ummm bye?
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by xmangaXfreakx | [ Reply to This ]
      well, there are a few spelling mistakes, and on the 3rd stanza, when you said 'I mean, I've known almost my whole life' I think you meant , 'I've known you almost my whole life'.
    I also think that 'I mean, ' doesn't really fit well in a poem a lot of the time, but other than that, this piece isn't too bad...

    Avril54
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by Avril54 | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem isn't as good as it could be. you are a pretty good writer for your age though so keep it up. you do have potential so don't get discouraged by this comment. you know what they say you win some you lose some.
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
      thats nice you did a good work in confusing me you would make a dead brain revive with this work but a believe that we are dealing with a very vast audience so please it would do you good to avoid abbreviations okay but generally you did great keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem. I can really relate, I thought it was really good. I like the rhyming too, I suck at rhyming ^.^
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by Saphyra | [ Reply to This ]
      p.s. Is that your pic? Because if so you're really pretty!
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by Saphyra | [ Reply to This ]


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