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Lost In A Face


Author: Aj
ASL Info:    21/M/MI
Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 102 /110 /29
Words: 56
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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basically we spend our entire lives being told that we are either to ugly or that we are the most beautiful specimen on earth, and whatever the case may be no one should ever judge some one by the way they look and we should all have learned by now that looks don't mean shit unless there are brains behind it.

did you know there are only less than ten super models in the whole world, and at the end of the day these ten or so self conscious so called beauty queens decide how you feel when you look in the mirror. it's a compaign of business proposition. "buy this make up and suddenly you'll be a super model just like this girl", and in actuality you yourself are more perfect than any plastic surgery disaster that walks down a run way.

is beauty in fact a curse?
i think so.


Lost In A Face



beauty a curse, who would have guessed?
the wieght to be a specimen greater than the rest
setting aside the flaw of beauty we might realize
that not focusing on beauty may be attempting to try
to relate to a person for a reason or a cause
realizing that judgement is the biggest flaw of all




Submitted on 2006-01-15 15:50:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  it's short and straight to the point... a spelling mistake on the first line could be corrected..i thik it could of been longer..the message is great though..later
| Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by Hip-Hop Honey | [ Reply to This ]
  theres a spelling mistake on the first line..but other than that, i liked this! its all so true!
i think that you could have incorperated some of the points in the poem that u made in the description, but i still like this!
Keep on digging!
| Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]


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