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I wrote this about a month ago. When I was first going out with Jr. and still thinking about kevin. I don't feel this way now about either of them. I am just friends with both...but I liked the poem, so tell me what you think...
Stuck
Slowly slipping And falling off the edge Wondering if you'll care enough, To try and save me Taking off my ring And looking into my eyes The look on your face says That you don't want me My eyes fill with tears I close them, Finally letting go But I don't fall Now safe again My eyes still closed I waite for you To take me in your arms I feel a touch And I open my eyes But it's not you that saved me Your standing in the distance Watching me I'm in his arms I'm not happy here I'm stuck And all I can think about Is you |
Submitted on 2006-01-15 18:49:11 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This is ridiculously pretty. I can see this picture in my head, you standing in the ones embrace, gazing longingly at the one in the distance, while the person who's arms are around you looks at your face. Or your mom's face. Or maybe all h*ll breaks loose, and you kick him and his mom in the face, then have a moment, and run away to the one you want, but then have to kick him in the face because he's being stupid. And then I'll throw a beer bottle in your general diraction, hitting him, and you'll break out in a rap about what a lame-*ss loser he really is, and then you'll run away and become a lesbian, and your dad will cry...| | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ] | that was really good..i agree it could use more flow...also it feels incomplete...it kinda leaves u hanging...but other then that it's good keep em' comin :D | | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by kapri49 | [ Reply to This ] | |
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